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Remembr With Me, But Only For a Day - for redfairie19

Jul 09, 2007 19:52

Title: Remember With Me, But Only For a Day
Author: desertport
Recipient: redfairie19
Author’s notes: PG. Made possible by the insightful comments of my beta, whose identity will be disclosed at the end of the challenge. The story doesn't exactly fit the challenge, but it does deal with the issues that were supposed to be raised. Hope it will be okay.
Summary: Martin ( Read more... )

challenge fic: summer 2007

Comments 8

leopardchic79 July 10 2007, 02:22:03 UTC

Oh...Danny was following him home in the rain. This was great...a very different sort of approach to the aftermath of the shooting. I really liked it!

desertport July 21 2007, 04:02:45 UTC

Glad you liked it! It's fun seeing all the different approaches to the shooting aftermath, isn't it?

smilla02 July 10 2007, 13:54:30 UTC

ow many times had Martin come across him pacing empty rooms,
talking to himself with his hands all over the place

I find this image of Danny really endearing, and SO Danny

Martin had a habit of choosing role models who were
difficult to please

and this one, so painfully Martin.

Love this story, how it comes together in the end with Danny following Martin in the rain, replying words for words what Martin was thinking. They are such a pair, aren't they?
Oh boys!

desertport July 21 2007, 04:08:09 UTC

Those quotes you picked may acually be my favorite parts of this whole fic. They seemed the most true to character, if that makes sense. (The Danny thing I got from the episode where the boxer disappears and Danny gets ambushed by this guy with a gun. After the shooting (no one gets hurt, IIRC), Sam's talking to Jack on the phone, and Jack asks how Danny's doing, and she's like, "Oh, he's still winding down" or something, and Danny's pacing around in the background talking to himself like he's on crack. As I remember it, anyway. Hee. Kinda stuck with me, poor freaked-out Danny.:)

They are such a pair, I agree. Thanks for the lovely review!

farad July 10 2007, 19:48:04 UTC

Nicely done. Painful to see Martin that way but I think very true to the character. Love him seeing Danny's pain through it and despite his own hurt, putting Danny first. That's Martin.

Great story. Thanks for sharing it!

desertport July 21 2007, 04:11:00 UTC

Love him seeing Danny's pain through it and despite his own hurt, putting Danny first. That's Martin.

He is sometimes surprisingly sensitive. I'm very glad you enjoyed this, and thank you for the feedback!

redfairie19 July 10 2007, 22:11:31 UTC

OH! So good.

It may not have been exactly what I asked for, but you did a wonderful job with it. I really like the end, with Martin sort of carelessly thorwing out there even though you know its such a big thing. *sigh* I have a soft spot for FirstMove!Martin.

Thanks so much!!!

desertport July 21 2007, 04:16:46 UTC

Thank you! I had a hard time choosing from all your prompts, and then when I started this one, Danny and Martin refused to argue. I was tearing my hair out trying to persuade them to be mad at each other, but they kept insisting they understood and loved each other, that their problems lay elsewhere. (Who knew they were so well-adjusted? *bops them*)

And then they refused to have sex.

*shakes head* Tsk.

I'm glad you enjoyed this, and thank you for providing such thought-provoking ideas!