Of Revelations, Theories and Unexpected Consequences [PG-13] for pencil_gal

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This story was generously written by a Pinch Hitter in a much shortened writing time. Their name will be revealed when we post our final Master List.

Title: Of Revelations, Theories and Unexpected Consequences
Author: in_my_blood
Rating: PG-13
Recipient: pencil_gal
Disclaimer: Nope, not mine. Nothing but the plot and occasional (just barely there if you look really

Comments

[ningloreth]

This is a great example of fade-to-black sex! The description of Draco's hands sliding up Hermione's sides, and of his thumbs... ahem... is intensely tactile; then the scene with them lying in bed together afterwards is intensely visual. It's like watching a film.

I love the premise, too. The New Thinking programme is canon-worthy. I would love to see a prequel in which Hermione approaches Draco and persuades him to fund it. And maybe a sequel in which someone tries to pervert it...

[in_my_blood]

Wow. Just Wow. As an author, to have your writing described like this, is simply amazing!

This is the first fic I've ever written, the first story I've completed, the first story which has been read by people who don't personally know and love me, and to have this kind of review...Thank you.

And I'm glad you saw beyond the fluffy-ness of it to the backbone of the story. The more serious stuff. Because that is what started the story.

I'm glad you enjoyed!

[unseen1969]

This was delightful! I so enjoyed their "foreplay" bickering. The intercom conversation might have been my favorite part, though the pillow-talk was excellent too.

The entire story was marvy. :)

[in_my_blood]

Why thank you! I'm so glad I got the dialogue down, seeing as at times I just hit walls with dialogue. Although, I must admit, this did just...flow. 'Twas brilliant. :D

[strawberry_kait]

Awesome, opossum! I thought this story had everything - banter, humor, insightfulness, sex appeal, and showed a great natural progression, with both the characters as well as the plot. Bravo! :)

[in_my_blood]

Wow. I mean, what do you say to someone who says your story has everything? EVERYTHING?! Just Wow. Especially considering this is the first fic I've ever written!

I'm so very glad you enjoyed it!

[d_vivace]

This was great fun! I really enjoyed the premise, and the dialogue was very witty. All & all, great job mystery author!

[in_my_blood]

Thank You! I'm glad you enjoyed the premise, as that's where it all started! With Draco explaining about Scorpius.

I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

[withdrawnred]

Haha, very nice. We like compensation, yes. And hopefully that "sufficient" number of dates is uno. Maybe dos.

[in_my_blood]

Yeeeehhh, more like dos. Or perhaps tres. :P It would be a fight between Hermione wanting to carry it through, to guarantee what they have is really and truly real, and her wanting to just throw all caution to the wind and get her hands on him again! And we all know Draco wouldn't be helping the first...But truly, I think she'd end up sticking to her guns. :D

[withdrawnred]

I would like to read this.

... Just saying.

[in_my_blood]

Haha, aww, I'll have to see! But oh, the possibilities....*grins*