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elevator music for just_drifting_6

Apr 12, 2010 12:09

Title: Elevator Music
Author: sevendayloan
Rating: PG-13 for some sexuality. Nothing explicit.
Pairing(s): DeWitt/Dominic
Recipient/Prompt: just_drifting_6 // "Elevator"
Disclaimer: Dollhouse does not belong to me.
Summary: Still, he can't help it, there's something about the elevator that makes him ... nervous.

A/N: The notorious elevator fic is a pretty ambitious ( Read more... )

Comments 15

duh_i_read April 12 2010, 21:12:41 UTC

This is hilarious! I love the how Adelle is toying with him, and the cracks in his resolve.

I especially love the lines : That staccato drumbeat, the tattoo of stilettos, beating an endless rhythm in his brain. Click-click-click. He can't quite get it out, and it lingers to infect his dreams with images he can't quite understand: all skyscrapers and pencil skirts.

sevendayloan April 12 2010, 21:53:00 UTC

Haha, thank you! I like the idea of n00b!Dom just thinking "WTF WTF WHAT HAVE I GOTTEN MYSELF INTO?"

Thanks again! <3

duh_i_read April 12 2010, 22:48:46 UTC

Hah, newbie Dom trying to keep his cover in the face of Adelle's sexy coolness. Clearly, there needs to be more newbie Dom fic.

sevendayloan April 15 2010, 02:31:49 UTC

Clearly this is correct and you should write it. ;)

just_drifting_6 April 15 2010, 00:55:36 UTC

Oh my god! Thank you so, so much! Serisouly, this is like, the best thing ever! Maybe I'm overreacting, but a fic written for me! And it's so good. Eee!

I'd copy and paste my favourite parts, but that'd pretty much be the entire thing. But:

He adjusts his tie.

She fixes her hair.

He fiddles with his cuff.

She straightens her skirt.

He checks his gun.

She unbuttons her blouse.

Well, shit. Don't look, he thinks. Don't look, don't look..

He looks.

So funny and wonderful! And:

Had he been imagining it? He must've been; there was no way that Adelle DeWitt, head of the LA Dollhouse and master of all she touches had just ... had she? Was she, was she laughing?

He needed to get more sleep.

Oh, Dom. Poor, poor Dom, and evil, evil Adelle. Just how they should be, of course ;)

I really liked how it was short and just like, a little moment between them that alluded to something but didn't change anything. And the Click-click-click was great; very well done ( ... )

sevendayloan April 15 2010, 02:33:10 UTC

Oh man, yay yay yay! I'm so glad you enjoyed this. :D You offered up a ton of good prompts- it was hard to chose! I've never really written fic before, so I was all nervous and stuff, but in the end it was a lot of fun. So really, I should be thanking you! <3

just_drifting_6 April 15 2010, 07:54:17 UTC

You should write more! You're so good! I couldn't write something like this, for sure. And there is always need for more D/D fic in this world (I read somewhere, I think in your comment on dollsome's vid, that you've forgotten about this pairing--sorry, a bit stalkerish, but NO! Never! Write fic to keep you from falling out of love!) So, please...write.

Ah, that was a bit random. Sorry :/

dollsome May 22 2010, 01:54:41 UTC

OH MY GOD YAY. ♥ I'm glad no one was around to witness me reading this, because oh, there was giddy beaming. So wonderful and vivid and funny and them! I love the notion of early-days Dominic having to sort of adjust to a life with Lots Of Proximity To Adelle DeWitt in it, because no mere mortal can just handle that with effortless composure, no matter how Badass NSA Spy you are.

He adjusts his tie.

She fixes her hair.

He fiddles with his cuff.

She straightens her skirt.

He checks his gun.

She unbuttons her blouse.

Well, shit. Don't look, he thinks. Don't look, don't look..

He looks.

♥ FOREVER.

jesterlady May 22 2010, 01:58:59 UTC

Adelle rules!

sevendayloan May 22 2010, 04:50:59 UTC

Hell yeah she does! xD

derevko_child May 24 2010, 14:01:27 UTC

Aheee. This is adorable!

Still, he can't help it, there's something about the elevator that makes him ... nervous.

He adjusts his tie.

She fixes her hair.

He fiddles with his cuff.

She straightens her skirt.

He checks his gun.

She unbuttons her blouse.

Well, shit. Don't look, he thinks. Don't look, don't look..

He looks.

Just <3... I wished we had a glimpse of what they were really like all the time together, not just the omg-something-is-wrong-again scenes.

sevendayloan May 24 2010, 14:45:41 UTC

Eee, yay, I'm glad you liked it! I was a little intimidated when I saw the elevator prompt, but then I decided to just have a little fun with it, et voila!

Man, I love these two. &hearts