mmm yummy. :P this is intense shit! i love how you use nature to describe, uhm... stuff? ;) no, but seriously, i like it. not as much as a lot of your other writing, as it doesn't flow as well as other poems you've written. not trying to get all analytical on you like some other people we know (coughGOEFFcough), but i just thought i'd give ya some feedback... :)
awww thanks so much for reading it! very heavily influenced by joanna newsom... especially songs like "swansea" and "sadie", start listening to her and you'll see what i mean. girl can write about nature... in a way that makes a city girl wanna write about it! she's from san fran herself. so we're really down lately.
i'm cracking up because i just put marcie down for her nap and i can hear her screaming and singing to herself like a banshee over the walkie talkie, she is the cutest thing ever... she kept yelling at me today: "DON'T TALK WHILE YOU'RE EATING!" and she just looks at me and goes: "now i'm happy!". ohmigod, love of my life... ;o)
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this is intense shit! i love how you use nature to describe, uhm... stuff? ;)
no, but seriously, i like it. not as much as a lot of your other writing, as it doesn't flow as well as other poems you've written. not trying to get all analytical on you like some other people we know (coughGOEFFcough), but i just thought i'd give ya some feedback... :)
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i'm cracking up because i just put marcie down for her nap and i can hear her screaming and singing to herself like a banshee over the walkie talkie, she is the cutest thing ever... she kept yelling at me today: "DON'T TALK WHILE YOU'RE EATING!" and she just looks at me and goes: "now i'm happy!". ohmigod, love of my life... ;o)
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