West Wing - Fan Fiction

[dr_ingram]

Fandom: West Wing
Title: Honey
Paring: Josh/Donna
Rating: General
Beta: None
Spoilers: Set after ‘In the Shadow of Two Gun Men’ but before ‘Noel’
Summary: Donna can’t help but enlighten Josh with a little trivia.

Edit: A kind hearted thank you to flippet for a little suggestion to the story and for giving some great feedback. It really is

Comments

[flippet]

Very cute! Could use a good beta-ing just to clean up some strays, but I like it. :-)

Here's what you're missing that I kind of expected, actually, and was disappointed not to find: (I've adjusted a sentence for you.)

“Well it’s always good to have a little bit of inane knowledge,” she said, glaring humorously at Josh as she turned, her golden hair slipping over her shoulder. “You never know what benefits you may get from it.”

Just the smallest allusion there gives it a nice kick, I think. :-)

[dr_ingram]

Yeah you're right, thanks. :) You don't mind if I add that do you?

It normally takes me a while to get into the characters and a writing style, I haven't written any fan fiction for over a year or so now. It does also help if it's been betaed. I just need to get my eye in with a few more little fics. Josh Donna banter is quite hard to get right, and I'm saying that as someone whose just read fan fic stories about them.

Glad that you liked it.

[flippet]

You don't mind if I add that do you?

Go ahead, just give me a drop of credit in your Author's Note. :-) (Like - 'Thanks to flippet for a slight tweak'. And anyone who sees my post will see what exactly I did.) It's still not perfect, I don't think (I massaged it for a few minutes, trying to keep most of what you had), but it's better.

[dr_ingram]

also i did rush this out perhaps a little too quick, but I was just kinda desperate to out it out there and get some feedback

[madamevoilanska]

I don't ordinarily comment, but I think you mean "locusts and frogs," not "lotuses and frogs." Lotuses are flowers, locusts are insects--and one of the 10 Plagues, which I believe you're referring to.

I like the story, though.

[dr_ingram]

thank you for pointing the mistake out. and glad you liked it. I know that it would be better if it had been betaed, but I just really wanted to get something out there

[adeluxe]

Hey, came to this through josh_donna and I really enjoyed this piece. A couple of mistakes, but nothing a beta couldn't fix.

I smiled at the mention of Colbert. Didn't fit in to the WW timeline, but it was a nice throw-in anyway. Imagine Stephen Colbert in the White House!

[dr_ingram]

thanks for the feedback as it's always nice to know if people enjoy your work or not:)

But i'm sorry to disapoint you as Gable and Colbert is a reference to It Happened One Night, one of my all time favourite films which starred Clark Gable and Claudette Colbert. Sorry :(

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[adeluxe]

*embarrassed* Oh wow...the youth is totally shining through here, eh?

I've *seen* It Happened One Night...Clark Gable was - is - one of my first crushes. I think I lived to be Scarlett O'Hara when I was around 13 (of course, I would have never gone after Ashley when there was gorgeous Rhett to be had). Silly, Comedy Central-ized brain!

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[dr_ingram]

That's okay, I know people are gonna thinkg it's Stephen Colbert, but I needed a name and the poster is on my wall it works so well.

Clark Gable was a great actor, when handled right by a great director, like Mr Capra. And I love Gone With The Wind, even though some of it a little ropy and bit and pieces of the acting are, somewhat, theatery, it's still an amazing film and it does manage to servive the miscasting of Leslie Howard as Ashley, how Errol Finn didn't get the part I'll never know.