New Poem

[dr_nabe]

I'm trying something new. et me know what you think. Be cruel or nice I like both

Comments

[ayoub]

This is very good.

Your choice of words, and the tears imagery is very powerful...

Bravo!

[dr_nabe]

Thank you.

[thetuesdayafter]

Your best poem so far. It flows naturally. Sometimes cliche but it works. It reads like prose but that's not a bad thing. I like this. I like your use of or. Your punctuation could do with a bit of work though. This might be smoother if you punctuated and capitalised like prose. It's conversationa, thoughtful and natural. Well done. Much improved since last I read your work.

L.

[dr_nabe]

Thanks.

[toxic_mystery]

This is really good, I like it alot. Especially the lines

'By fate or relation'

'His conscience is dead'
&
'By mistake or fortune'

it's a really emotive piece and well written.

[dr_nabe]

Thanks. Now I'm looking for another boost of inspiration and I hope it comes soon.