Fic: "Substitute" Chapter 9

[dracomaleficium]

Back from Greece now and absolutely no suntan to show for it. Damn my easily-burnt skin. In other news, life is being crazy now with the summer break over and sister back from her practice, so I won't have nearly as much time for writing. This saddens me.

Anyway!

Title: "Substitute" Chapter 9: Of Kids and Police Chiefs
Word Count: 9, 225
Warnings:

Comments

[errantknightess]

Excuse me, but... THE BEI FONGS!!! And both of them! And both awesome and badass as usually! All my love!!! I enjoyed the hell out of every single bit with those ladies. And you definitely don't fail at snark; Toph was perfect. Plus, I liked that you signaled that under her nonchalant facade she still and could use some friends. That was sweet. Moar Toph, please! :D
Ekhem. Yes. It was an exciting chapter. A lot is going on, new things pop up, there's action and sweat and everything we like. I really like the way you write the sparring scenes - you animate with words just as magnificently as fights are animated in ATLA. Very dynamic and interesting, and it's beyond precious how you characterize Zuko with his style of fighting. You've done that before, I recall, but it's always a great treat. Toph vs. Aang was great, too - I loved this reflection of their fight in The Blind Bandit! :D Yeah, generally, all the kids from the DDC are fun to read about; I'm always waiting for the class scenes - well, the kind of 'social dynamics' between

[dracomaleficium]

Yay, thank you! Yep, writing Toph (and the rest of the kids) is incredibly fun and I enjoy writing the club scenes a lot :D The problem with putting a lot of student interactions in this one is that it's from the POV of a teacher, who isn't really part of the inner circle and doesn't interact with the students outside of the gym, so I can't put as much of school life as I'd like without making the story feel as if it's dragging. This is partly what I might use the companion series for, actually, and I'll let you know when I write something for it with student interaction or stuff that's somehow relevant instead of silly porn - I already have a few ideas

[errantknightess]

Aaah, yes, a teacher's POV is tricky in that sense. I love to bits the way you conduct it, sure, but it does restrict the story. I'll keep my fingers crossed for the companion series, then. That would be a very welcomed bonus :D

Let me tell you, you're doing really great if it comes to showing their relationship. I wouldn't be here if you didn't ;) I'm easy to squick out. But there's absolutely nothing squicky in your story. It's tasteful, though the taste is bitter. You will not butcher it, don't worry! You're perfectly capable of pulling it off. Anyone can see that if they just look at your writing.

[anonymous]

The days you update are indeed happy days.... :)

~Saknett

[dracomaleficium]

I can't believe you're actually reading this story :D Thank you!

[luunyscarlet]

You can imagine my glee when I got back from Australia and saw that this fic was updated :D. I love Toph and Lin's relationship. I assume there were a LOT of arguments between Lin and her brother about their treatment of Toph.
I liked the sparring scene as well. Zuko's style of fighting was so HIM! Sorry Zuko, if you want Jee to not think of you as a kid, you'll have to think up something :P.

[dracomaleficium]

Yes, I imagine each Bei Fong reunion has a positively sizzling atmosphere and ends up in shouty arguments...

Thank you! I'm so glad you continue to enjoy the story :D I'm sure Zuko will think of something eventually... :]