barrelling my way through a lack of inspiration...

[dragonette1388]

Ok, so its been a few days since I last wrote something, I seem to have lost my inspiration. So this is an attempt to force myself back, but I don't expect much to come of it

Comments

[_nachtwolf_]

hm. Not sure where it could go, or where it is precisely..but done right, the end result could be interesting. One bit of criticism though...

You use both present and past-tense within the writing. It, to me anyway, makes the reading feel a bit off, or uneven. It can work in certain layouts, but the way this is written, it seems more like writing errors than design (not sure if it was intentional or not). Otherwise, I like the detail put into it, as with previous writings I've read.

[dragonette1388]

Yeah, it just kinda happened that way. I decided to leave it all the way it came out. I notice I tend to do that when describing a person's thought process and feelings. Then it switches itself back to past tense. Weird...

[_nachtwolf_]

I had begun writing a story a good while back that I designed to use both past and present tense. The way I had it set up, it was rather interesting, and fun to write. Not sure if I still having somewhere on Compy or not.. hm....