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My IWRY Entry - Heavy Hearts

Nov 05, 2011 18:05

Today is my day for the IWRY marathron. So go over and read Heavy Hearts and then read the other stories (if you haven't already - they're fantastic).

Let me know what you think.

pairing: angel/buffy, char: buffy, buffy the vampire slayer, char: angel, fanfiction

Comments 6

ares132006 November 7 2011, 03:45:47 UTC

I left you feedback over at the IWRY LJ but I had to say again how much I enjoyed this story. Such despair and grief, Buffy's mother and friends dead, and Buffy herself relies on Angel to get her through.

I love how this tale follows canon, and yet is just that wee bit off kilter, giving us an alternate view of what could have happened.

Great character voices, wonderful dialogue and a killer last line.

Ares

dralf_burns November 8 2011, 04:44:07 UTC

More feedback is always welcome :)

Changing a small detail of canon (well, I suppose this isn't so small but in the grand scheme of things) and then seeing the ripple effect is a fun thing to do.

Again, glad to hear about the last line. Definitely supposed to be a knife to the heart, from what we know about Angel and perfect happiness.

Thanks again!

perpetual November 26 2011, 04:01:46 UTC

Finally reading and reviewing. *does a boogie ( ... )

dralf_burns November 27 2011, 04:05:40 UTC

Thank you for the review.

They are indeed all drabbles. I thought it would be an interesting challenge to write the story in 100-word drabbles. The worst part was being stuck at 101 words and having to choose a word to delete (or rewriting a section).

The fair was one of my favorite parts too. As was writing the development of their relationship.

You may pretend things will be okay. After all, once a story ends, it's free game as to what happens next. Though if I ever get around to writing a sequel...

Well, there's always Ms. Calendar. Buffy could meet her since Jenny would've been sent to Sunnydale to keep an eye on Angel... And she'd feel sorry for Buffy and Angel, translate the gypsy curse (and work out the loophole with the extra time), and cast it.

Thanks again. I had a blast writing this and I've enjoyed reading the other entries, so thank you for the marathon.

zuriel November 29 2011, 03:14:41 UTC

I'm finally getting to read IWRY stories now...and this one was great!

I liked the twist, changing canon around. And doing this in drabbles was a feat I doubt I'd ever attempt (I'm not that disciplined!). Bravo!

And there's that ending again... Hmm...

shrinky

dralf_burns December 1 2011, 03:15:31 UTC

Thanks for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Twisting canon is always fun. As for the drabbles, I thought it would be a good challenge to write the story entirely in 100-word drabbles. It was frustrating, but it also made sure I didn't get too wordy (which can be a problem for me).