Palm tree Drabble

[dream_bigger20]

I'm a big fan of baby steps. This was something i wrote a few years back (probably the best thing I ever came up with lol)

In the midst of the clouds and fog, stood a palm tree on a small island. Proud and enduring, the tree barley swayed in the wind,  for its roots went deep within the Earth. The sun rose and its rays reflected brilliantly on the

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[kore_rising]

So now (writerly exercise 101) ask yourself- what do I like about this? How could I heighten the effects I like?
(It's nice, btw. Don't tell yourself you don't have potential!)

[dream_bigger20]

Yes professor! If only I knew how to heighten what I like about this. But really I've learned to leave this one alone. I spent weeks trying to think of something to write to follow this paragraph (in the beginning it was supposed to an introduction)and to this day can't think of anything. Hmm maybe I'll prompt it for round 7 see what someone else thinks of. OOO! Arthur dreaming this and all of a sudden it hits him that he better make a move on Ardiene! Idk why she would be a palm tree though...lol.
Thanks for your help! It's very much appreciated if only I could figure out how to take my answers and do something with them. Baby steps i suppose =D

[kore_rising]

8) Class dismissed!
The best piece of advice I was ever given about writing was that it should appeal to the senses, as many as possible at once. Human beings are visual creatures, but we have four others which can come into play. The texture of each word that you use plays into that, be it describing something visual as a feel (think of the word dank)or something aural as a sight (bright) or something scented as sound even (a blast).
Perhaps she could be under the palm tree? Or they're stuck on a desert island? And yes, baby steps are the way to go. And write, all the time! And read!

[dream_bigger20]

What good advice! I'll do my best to incorporate that. I actually started a mini inception story today during class (lol) it's not coming out as I want (what else is new) but I'm going to try to make it work. The basic idea if how Ardiene doesn't fit in with her peers after inception and she's on such a higher level intellectually that she's having a horrible time bonding with people around her. Que Arthur entering and getting rid of the loneliness.

It's so freaken hard not to hit "I'm a shallow teen with a superiority complex" and stick to "I'm mature and have experienced so much more then these people will ever imagine, how am I supposed to connect with them?"

[dream_bigger20]

ooo! Thanks so much! Hmm I think I'll have her try to go back to college life (attend parties, hang out with her friends) but she'll have extreme difficulties relating with them. Maybe she'll become withdrawn and Miles will notice and contact Cobb... who will call Arthur(?) hmm maybe Arthur went through the same thing? If this turns out to be too much for me, at least i got a cool prompt for round 7! =D

I REALLY like your bar idea. It sounds like it would hurt me less then the one I described. haha writing is a vicious affair sometimes.

How do you take universal themes like isolation, love etc and avoid cliches? Write the characters in a touching and unique way right? Now how do I do that lol. Write honestly.... and not abuse cliche phrases? lol