Fic commentary on Time, as requested by deird1. Hope you find it interesting, if not mildly amusing. :P The original fic is included, with my commentary in blockquotes.
Great comments, and I enjoyed reading the fic again, too.
I love the way you've presented the afterlife, with the time-bendy train-ride, the greeter (like stepping off a plane and looking for a sign with your name), the wonderful mix of the familiar and bizarre and just the way that each person is given what they need. I also liked the extras you mentioned - it made the afterlife seem like a bustling and lively place, which is...a little different, I think, but that's part of the charm. :)
I loved the whole train-ride idea, and your comments on it really are fascinating.
I'm glad!
Never would have guessed you were having trouble with Doyle's voice - you've written the most convincing Doyle conversation I've ever read...
Oh wow, really? Sweet. I actually have quite a bit of trouble writing accents, (Fred's included) and have to sit, talking to myself all the while in said accent, while getting funny looks from anyone else who's around..
I actually have quite a bit of trouble writing accents, (Fred's included) and have to sit, talking to myself all the while in said accent, while getting funny looks from anyone else who's around..
Hee! I do that! Not for everyone - but for Spike, Fred, Gunn, and Buffy, I have to read their dialogue in an accent, or it just doesn't get onto the page properly.
Not for everyone - but for Spike, Fred, Gunn, and Buffy, I have to read their dialogue in an accent, or it just doesn't get onto the page properly.
Definitely. I don't think I've ever even attempted Gunn, not speaking anyway, and I feel like writing Spike would just make my brain combust..but I definitely have to do it for Fred constantly, and, I'm learning, for Buffy too. Writing The Figment was kind of interesting, in the sense that I was constantly jumping back and forth between two ways of talking, that both required me to babble out loud..
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I love the way you've presented the afterlife, with the time-bendy train-ride, the greeter (like stepping off a plane and looking for a sign with your name), the wonderful mix of the familiar and bizarre and just the way that each person is given what they need. I also liked the extras you mentioned - it made the afterlife seem like a bustling and lively place, which is...a little different, I think, but that's part of the charm. :)
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-snuggle squish-
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*snogs*
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Hee! Fantastic!
I loved the whole train-ride idea, and your comments on it really are fascinating.
Never would have guessed you were having trouble with Doyle's voice - you've written the most convincing Doyle conversation I've ever read...
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I'm glad!
Never would have guessed you were having trouble with Doyle's voice - you've written the most convincing Doyle conversation I've ever read...
Oh wow, really? Sweet. I actually have quite a bit of trouble writing accents, (Fred's included) and have to sit, talking to myself all the while in said accent, while getting funny looks from anyone else who's around..
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Hee! I do that!
Not for everyone - but for Spike, Fred, Gunn, and Buffy, I have to read their dialogue in an accent, or it just doesn't get onto the page properly.
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Definitely. I don't think I've ever even attempted Gunn, not speaking anyway, and I feel like writing Spike would just make my brain combust..but I definitely have to do it for Fred constantly, and, I'm learning, for Buffy too. Writing The Figment was kind of interesting, in the sense that I was constantly jumping back and forth between two ways of talking, that both required me to babble out loud..
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