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[drinkwellwords]

Title: Wild Sage (Part I)
Pairing: Gillian Welch/David Rawlings, Gillian Welch/David Rawlings/Conor Oberst, John Darnielle/Conor Oberst
Rating: R
Prompt: chocolate
Summary: You watch them dance in the kitchen in the mornings while David makes breakfast, or listen to his guitar-playing at night while Gillian cooks dinner.
Word Count: 989
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[_poetic_harlot_]

You know what this reminds me of? Conor being sort of comatose. Like he'll open his eyes every once in a while and that's all you'll see before he's out again. Little snippets that are almost haphazard, but so damn important nonetheless.

That probably sounds retarded. But as I was reading this, that was all I could think of. And the entire time, my chest was tight because Conor is just getting smaller and smaller and I always want him to get rescued. This entire thing was beautiful and touching in such an aching sort of way.

David and Gillian remind me of the couple in Waste of Paint, by the way. Which...I loved.

<3

[fedradiowires]

I write really haphazardly, I think. I don't like things being absolutely linear. I'd much, much rather have little snippets. And maybe Conor is kind of comatose. I think Tim's parts are a lot less choppy.

I am so glad you liked it. I always hold my breath when I know you're reading.

I didn't even think of that, but it was totally there subconsciously. Totally. >_>

<3

[_poetic_harlot_]

You write really beautifully. That's what you do, you geek. It's the fact that your stories aren't linear that helps them along. Your characters aren't linear, so why would the story be? The snippets are just so damn nice, even the painful ones. With Conor being in a coma. And I want Tim to fix him so bad, because the mentions of him, the way everybody seems to remind Conor of him, just break my heart a little.

And this is why you are a dork, missy. I haven't a clue why you'd hold your breath while I'm reading, hahaha.

It was looovely <33333

[fedradiowires]

The whole reminding-Conor-of-Tim bit is part of why the people in the story are who they are. You look at David Rawlings or John Darnielle, and you can see some vague similarities. Conor's looking for them and wanting to see them, so of course they stand out majorly to him.

Because! I love yoouuu, and it's important for you to approve.

Thank you <33333333

[__didntthinkso]

Oh, you. Oh, this. Y'know, the first thing I thought of when I heard of was that particular verse of Waste of Paint. And then I saw _poetic_harlot_ had already jumped on that, so I guess I'll have to find some other way to be astute. (That says a lot for you, by the way, that you've conjured up a strong enough image that two people would spot it.)

As usual, I'm a huge fan of your details. The way you reference Conor's bones as being prominent - it's true and pretty. One thing I liked? this dress that is so, so stereotypically Western that she either got it at a thrift store or some upscale hipster shop. That is incredibly fair. I love the little nod there that says a lot about Gillian's character without saying anything at all. She could be pretentious, or just truly earthy, but either way her intentions are good. You can't hold it against her

[__didntthinkso]

Oh god, I'm sorry, I forgot, one tiny thing.

"Are you hungry? I was just going to start making dinner."

You nods

I know it wasn't intentional, but I figured I'd just point it out for editing purposes. Not trying to be a snarkasaurus or anything.

[fedradiowires]

Thank you! I am a grammar nazi, but I never catch all of my own mistakes.

[fedradiowires]

Thank you. Thank you so much. I'm glad you spotted it, too, now that I think about it. It's one of my favourite Bright Eyes songs.

And. Yeah. I admit to liking the dress part, mostly because I love those kinds of dresses, and you see them all the time on the countrified hipsters in Toronto. She's also absolutely gorgeous.

You'll probably see some of the dynamic in the second part of this. When I saw Bright Eyes perform in May, I was particularly struck by how easily Gillian Welch and David Rawlings incorporated Conor into their act, so that's part of where this comes from.

Also, yes. It's both Matthew and Justin who really helped Conor - Matthew was in a band or two with him, I think - but I wanted to acknowledge as much as I could. I'm making this as canon as I can, while taking my liberties. (I think I'm justified. Who wouldn't want to see Conor Oberst and John Darnielle?)

Thank you. ♥

[tricky_slip]

your writing is flawless.
it builds at just the perfect pace and the description is just subtle enough to not be overdone but i can still picture absolutly everything that's happening with perfect clarity.
it's haunting and brilliant and i haven't been this excited for a story in a long time.
you capture every emotion so beautifully with your words. the confusion and complete seperation that conor is feeling is so tangible it hurts.
and i agree with poetic_hartot completely. the time moves so quickly but yet conor is just stuck in this place and the imagery you describe really does make it seem like he is collapsing within himself.
and how he sees tim in everyone.. that kills. it just drives the hurt in farther than i ever thought it could go.

this is amazing.
you have reaffirmed my love for this pairing and conor and bright eyes and cursive. i've found myself listening to them a lot lately, and i'm pretty sure i have you to thank.

♥

[fedradiowires]

Thank you so much.
It's really encouraging, you know, how you keep leaving comments. Because of my character choices, this story isn't all that popular, but I'd really rather have one or two people who honestly enjoy it than twenty people who leave "WOW ZOMGZ."

I'm really, really glad you're enjoying this.
♥

[mandlebars]

somehow I,this Conor seems passive, almost like anyone can mold him into what they want him to be.

[mandlebars]

i missed this*

[fedradiowires]

They can, and I think that's a large part of who and what he is: this little kitten who's just desperate for attention and affection.

[mandlebars]

i see* even, lost my glasses =/

which leads me to wonder, can he be fixed? he's a love junkie it seems unable to be alone, and he'll only be fixed if he is able to function by himself