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[drinkwellwords]

Title: Wild Sage Part III
Pairing: John Darnielle/Conor Oberst, Gillian Welch/David Rawlings/Conor Oberst
Rating: PG
Prompt: Alpha Rats Nest
Summary: When the phone call comes, it's completely unexpected.
Word Count: 823
Disclaimer
Notes: This is the last part of the Wild Sage arc! Have to Explode, however, will continue.

Comments

[_poetic_harlot_]

Ah. Frankih. Seriously. The little snippets of Conor and Gillian and David were gorgeous, for starters. All of the tiny gestures make all three of them seem to have evolved together. The kiss on her leg and calling Conor baby. The dancing, again. The picture of Conor dancing with his arms in the air.

You gave so many beautiful pictures while driving the plot along at the same time. And that made the snippets even more gorgeous, the fact that there's so much tension beneath everything else. I loved how things are between John and David even though we never quite see anything of it at all.

And the repetition. Just the second posting of that one part drove home how big Tim getting sick is. And I know this is like...the lamest comment ever, but I have a lack of woooords. I love you and this and flailing. Definite flailing.

[fedradiowires]

!!! You! Okay, so I am so glad you liked this. I'm always relieved, when you like it. I'm so happy that the repetition works for you, because I was a little worried it wouldn't work.

Also! Where are you! I want to pounce you.

[tricky_slip]

i love how everything looped back together the way it did, how you started off the story with the phone call that obviously is not something conor wants to hear. and then how it shifts to a quiet moment between him and gillian...
it's like he's slowly waking up from a dream, and by the end, it's just cold reality.

Your friends, they were all vampires, too, and you kissed and drank and fucked, and it was what you did. You painted the town all shades of red.
and that... that left me speechless. it was such a beatifully crafted sentence, very simple but filled with just the right amount of detail and emotion to drive the meaning home.

this was beautifully done and perfectly executed, and for a format that is incredibly difficult to write, you made it seem effortless.
i really admire your writing. it's stands out so much from everything else i have ever read.
amazing.

[fedradiowires]

Thank you so much! I'm happy you liked that sentence, and the format of the piece. I love reading your comments; you always have something useful to say.

♥

[__didntthinkso]

Just going to launch right into it, then.

I love the way Gillian talks to Conor. It's interesting. Most stories, I'm completely detached from the characters, like I'm watching them through a window, and I like that feeling. This, it made me lonely for someone to play with my hair and stuff. Made me sad right off the bat, but in a good way. You connected, for sure.

John. John's a weird case, because I think he's actually got good intentions, but Conor's too timid for that kind of treatment. It's a really thought-provoking characterization, and I love the relationship between them and David and everything.

The end. Well, thank God, to be honest. Conor couldn't stay in this weird limbo place forever. It's like - he'd healed, and if he'd stayed longer, it wouldn't have been right. He's stronger now, and he needs to go back as such.

I loved this. I can't wait for more.

[fedradiowires]

Thank you. To say that you're involved with it, connected, that's one of the best compliments I could have been given.

And. Yeah. John always strikes me as odd, in songs by him, that kind of bordering-on-asshole mistake-making self-destructive guy hovering in the corner. I'd like to write about him more, I think.

Also... yeah. There was only so much to be done in Wild Sage, and its time is over. I liked writing it, though. And you hall have more soon.

♥