What about Full Circle? FULL CIRCLE! It's not as great as people claim it is. It's lame! Lame, I say! And what about that crappy sequel? I know it's crappy. I wrote it.
Sorry for the outburst. *sigh* I was really hoping to get splattered in some of these challenges. I'm beginning to think that if I want some concrit, I have to give it to myself. We all know how that turns out, though.
Hey, I shook the Full Circle 2 tree to you one day, if you recall.
Fine. Kagome gets tossed around like a leaf in the wind and seems to just *poof* come to terms with everything immediately. Rin is a Mary Sue without the foul stench of self-insertion. Uh...I think you kinda kiss Sesshoumaru's ass a little bit, but that's just me.
That's why I gave it a 98 or 99. I don't remember. Concrit achieved.
Did I ever tell ya, I almost never read past the Purification of the Jewel in the Lucky Ones?
I still dig it out and read it from time to time, but I think Kagome goes freakout schizo at weird moments, but otherwise is too much the saint, and InuYasha morphs into Robin Williams in "Being Human" in the second half...and his voice is just a little too off from the voice he has in my head in the first half (of course, having Inu's voice match the one in my head never is a criteria for me to like a story). But the first half is still one of my comfort reads, that I reread cause there's enough in the story that feels good to me.
And I really like Yukio.
I had trouble getting into Absence...It wasn't the quality of writing or even the storytelling strength. I think it was the setup.
I think I've read the others, but don't remember them well enough by name to comment.
Actually I think that the weak portions of The Lucky Ones lies in the early parts. It is filled with fear and dread of the Promise crap which fills up much of older I/K fanfiction. It is only when they are older that they seem more confident and are truly able to express themselves as individuals. Before that they are huddled together in dread that Kikyo will come and take Inuyasha away. Loved how Yukio drove into the shrine for the homecoming and surprised his grandmother. Almost as good a homecoming as The Appointment.The anniversiary party is our first chance to see the kids as individuals. The best chapter of the book is where Inuyasha is holding Kagome standing on Tenseiga and preventing her from dying by holding onto the red thread. I could not help but cry when their dead kids came to offer their energy for their parents. You knew that they had to be good parents if the kids who had died were willing to save them from dying.
The Lucky Ones is still one of the only IY/K epic fics I will recc to people without guilt or twinges. That and Sueric's Chronicles. I don't have any epics written for S/K (I'm talking more than 300,000 words written) that I'd recc.
Chronicles is another one that's okay. It's a long satisfying read, clever in points, that has a reasonable plot.
If I had a beef with Chronicles, it would be that it's a 180,000 word fic trapped in a 323,434 word body. That woman writes prose so ultraviolet that it raises my risk of skin cancer.
I'll reread pieces of Chronicles from time to time, but I think I've only read it from beginning to end maybe 3 times (very low reread count for me). There's a lot in it that I like. But you may be on to why I have trouble with it.
That and feeling sorry for Myouga....(being silly alert)
Assuming I can tag myself as a "writer", I would say that I'm an underwriter, which would make my natural enemy the overwriter.
I want to go through overwritten pieces like Chronicles with the strikethrough of doom, and overwriters want to go through my stuff with a lot of adverbs and paragraphs describing scenes and emotions. ;)
hee. i'd ask for a review but since i've never finished anything, you'd be stuck. AND i have about a thousand things to do at the moment and you'd want to badger me. so i guess i should just slink away, dropping only this little meaningless turd several days after it's relevance has been peaked.
Gisei was an elegant, long one-shot that kept Sesshoumaru reasonably in character, which is something few people seem to figure out. It's well described without being purple, and the emotions are more subtle than shrill. I'd recommend it.
Glaring flaw(s): The entire thing is in bold for some reason. A bombardment of OCs and the liberal use of Japanese terminology give it a veneer of authenticity while sucking the flow and fun out of it.
Heh. you're obviously reading the media miner version. they screw up formatting like nothing. uh. Gisei isn't supposed to be flowy and fun, so i'm going to take that as a compliment!
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Sorry for the outburst. *sigh* I was really hoping to get splattered in some of these challenges. I'm beginning to think that if I want some concrit, I have to give it to myself. We all know how that turns out, though.
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Fine. Kagome gets tossed around like a leaf in the wind and seems to just *poof* come to terms with everything immediately. Rin is a Mary Sue without the foul stench of self-insertion. Uh...I think you kinda kiss Sesshoumaru's ass a little bit, but that's just me.
That's why I gave it a 98 or 99. I don't remember. Concrit achieved.
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But hey, I can strain criticism of anything out if I try hard enough.
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I fart in your general direction LJ-Cuts!
Your father was a hamster, and we all know the rest. ;P
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I still dig it out and read it from time to time, but I think Kagome goes freakout schizo at weird moments, but otherwise is too much the saint, and InuYasha morphs into Robin Williams in "Being Human" in the second half...and his voice is just a little too off from the voice he has in my head in the first half (of course, having Inu's voice match the one in my head never is a criteria for me to like a story). But the first half is still one of my comfort reads, that I reread cause there's enough in the story that feels good to me.
And I really like Yukio.
I had trouble getting into Absence...It wasn't the quality of writing or even the storytelling strength. I think it was the setup.
I think I've read the others, but don't remember them well enough by name to comment.
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Absence has...7 chapters, I think? I was on the cusp of bailing for 3, and then it hit a stride.
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It is only when they are older that they seem more confident and are truly able to express themselves as individuals. Before that they are huddled together in dread that Kikyo will come and take Inuyasha away.
Loved how Yukio drove into the shrine for the homecoming and surprised his grandmother.
Almost as good a homecoming as The Appointment.The anniversiary party is our first chance to see the kids as individuals. The best chapter of the book is where Inuyasha is holding Kagome standing on Tenseiga and preventing her from dying by holding onto the red thread. I could not help but cry when their dead kids came to offer their energy for their
parents. You knew that they had to be good parents if the kids who had died were willing to save them from
dying.
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If I had a beef with Chronicles, it would be that it's a 180,000 word fic trapped in a 323,434 word body. That woman writes prose so ultraviolet that it raises my risk of skin cancer.
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That and feeling sorry for Myouga....(being silly alert)
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I want to go through overwritten pieces like Chronicles with the strikethrough of doom, and overwriters want to go through my stuff with a lot of adverbs and paragraphs describing scenes and emotions. ;)
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=D
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Glaring flaw(s): The entire thing is in bold for some reason. A bombardment of OCs and the liberal use of Japanese terminology give it a veneer of authenticity while sucking the flow and fun out of it.
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