A Lesson in Etiquette 1/2
anonymous
November 12 2010, 08:17:53 UTC
It's tight- too tight, it feels like, and really, Kida can't understand how it isn't hurting- how Izaya isn't whimpering in pain or maybe even tearing his lip open in an effort to keep quiet. But no, Izaya's laughing, the sound muffled into Kida's clavicle and just- he really doesn't get it.
He hadn't understood at first either, when Shizuo had first walked in on them, Kida's cock halfway down Izaya's throat, his fingers trembling in dark hair. He'd watched in the dim light of Izaya's flat as Shizuo pulled the other man off of him, the two snarling at each other, near feral, knocking over lamps and tables in their brief chase around the room. Watched as lamps shattered around him, pitching the room into near darkness. Watched as Shizuo caught Izaya by the collar and dragged him close, nose to nose. As something almost tangible had snapped, angry words giving way to the click of teeth against teeth and lips against lips and eventually, the slick slide of Izaya lowering himself back onto Shizuo's cock
( ... )
A Lesson in Etiquette 2/2
anonymous
November 12 2010, 08:18:55 UTC
When he glances over, Izaya is watching him with a calculating look in his eye, smirk still there, but wider, as if he's seen something that has pleased him. Izaya raises a brow towards him, smirk stretching even further until he's grinning, grinding himself back onto them and leaning close for his own kiss.
Kissing Izaya is different. For all that Shizuo is freakishly strong and a lot a bit scary, it's Izaya whose kiss hurts more- bruising and biting, wet, sharp, and still somehow a little bit playful. Below them Shizuo is growling again, hissing words that might be some variation of their names. Kida wonders, because if he's this vocal like this, he can only imagine how utterly wrecked Shizuo would sound if he were the one getting fucked. If it were him stretched tight and hot around Kida's cock, how he'd probably like it, how he'd probably be gagging for it after that first brush deep inside him
( ... )
hot damn.
anonymous
November 13 2010, 09:15:04 UTC
... Wow. That was amazing.
Your phrasing throughout was absolutely excellent -- just enough description and just enough communication of need, of interest, of urgency and unexpectedness. Most impressive was the way in which his fantasies were equally, if not more so, arousing as the rest, which says a lot considering how rather well-written the actual porn was.
Seriously, incredibly hot, anon. You are a pro.
I'm very glad you posted this -- thank you so much. It was short, sweet, and much appreciated. This is by far some of my favorite smut on the meme, and I've been here quite a while.
Re: A Lesson in Etiquette 2/2
anonymous
November 14 2010, 12:08:47 UTC
Wow... just...WOW. I've reread this fic about 3 times now. It is so....tantalizing.. -droolssssss-
I'm amazed how you wrote them together, amazed at how you made them work SO well. And YES Kida. YOU ALL LOOKED AMAZING TOGETHER! I WISH you and Shizuo were brothers hahahaha!!
Amazing fucking smut is fucking amazing. Fap worthy...So so fap worthy.
Re: A Lesson in Etiquette 2/2
anonymous
November 14 2010, 16:50:15 UTC
So the smut was incredibly, incredibly hot, but what I love most about this entire fill is the way you write. Because HOLY HELL, you write wonderfully *u* I agree with the above anon who said that you very effectively communicated the sense of urgency and arousal, but all with absolutely beautiful prose! And your choice to do the whole thing from Kida's perspective, who has no idea what the hell Izaya's thinking, or whether or not Shizuo and Izaya have done this before, is just BRILLIANT.
Author!anon, this is some classy porn. I'm hoping you've filled more on this kinkmeme, because I don't think I can get enough of your writing. Thank you for filling this! :D
He hadn't understood at first either, when Shizuo had first walked in on them, Kida's cock halfway down Izaya's throat, his fingers trembling in dark hair. He'd watched in the dim light of Izaya's flat as Shizuo pulled the other man off of him, the two snarling at each other, near feral, knocking over lamps and tables in their brief chase around the room. Watched as lamps shattered around him, pitching the room into near darkness. Watched as Shizuo caught Izaya by the collar and dragged him close, nose to nose. As something almost tangible had snapped, angry words giving way to the click of teeth against teeth and lips against lips and eventually, the slick slide of Izaya lowering himself back onto Shizuo's cock ( ... )
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Kissing Izaya is different. For all that Shizuo is freakishly strong and a lot a bit scary, it's Izaya whose kiss hurts more- bruising and biting, wet, sharp, and still somehow a little bit playful. Below them Shizuo is growling again, hissing words that might be some variation of their names. Kida wonders, because if he's this vocal like this, he can only imagine how utterly wrecked Shizuo would sound if he were the one getting fucked. If it were him stretched tight and hot around Kida's cock, how he'd probably like it, how he'd probably be gagging for it after that first brush deep inside him ( ... )
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Your phrasing throughout was absolutely excellent -- just enough description and just enough communication of need, of interest, of urgency and unexpectedness. Most impressive was the way in which his fantasies were equally, if not more so, arousing as the rest, which says a lot considering how rather well-written the actual porn was.
Seriously, incredibly hot, anon. You are a pro.
I'm very glad you posted this -- thank you so much. It was short, sweet, and much appreciated. This is by far some of my favorite smut on the meme, and I've been here quite a while.
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Will fap to this again. Bookmarked.
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I'm amazed how you wrote them together, amazed at how you made them work SO well. And YES Kida. YOU ALL LOOKED AMAZING TOGETHER! I WISH you and Shizuo were brothers hahahaha!!
Amazing fucking smut is fucking amazing. Fap worthy...So so fap worthy.
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Author!anon, this is some classy porn. I'm hoping you've filled more on this kinkmeme, because I don't think I can get enough of your writing. Thank you for filling this! :D
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