Better Days (Fraser's Version)

[kassy_syd]

Title: Better Days
Pairing: RayK/Fraser
Rating: T
Word Count: 384
Quote: “True it is that we have seen better days” - As you like it - Shakespeare
Summary: How Fraser feels about Rayk and the death of Stella - A Sestina
Notes: (\Yes this is a kind of sequel but not really, they're two sides of the same story but it makes more sense if you read the other

Comments

[mizface]

um, stanza 5, line 4 - there's a word missing, and "couldn't" is repeated

Other than that - very nicely done. Stanza 3 rang so true for Fraser, as did 4 for Ray, and how they deal with their emotions so differently.

Because he never does anything gently Soooo Ray.

[kassy_syd]

gah, serves me right for posting too fast :P thanks heaps, I've just fixed it.

It's funny I didn't expect it to work for Fraser, not the same words at least because they both think and feel so differently. I felt like I shouldn't be trying to fit Fraser's mind into the confines I set for Ray but actually I think it did ok all considered. A fun excercise anyway and strangely I actually like Fraser's version better - go figure.

Thanks for the help!

[wihluta]

I really love those poems. This one is my favourite.

Also, Wow! to you for pulling this off. It's fantastic and fits very well with the challenge. :D

[kassy_syd]

Thank you!
This is my favorite as well :) fun to write.