Comments | ducktastical: ooc: critique post.

ducktastical

ooc: critique post.

Feb 15, 2020 19:23

How's my driving, polychromatic?

If you've got any issues, suggestions or comments on how I'm playing Ahiru @ poly, please post them here! Post them anonymous, in the flesh, however you'd like! ♥

critique post, ooc, ahiru

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OOC sword_and_quill March 17 2010, 03:12:44 UTC

Iiiii guess we can chat here? You can delete the comments when we're done, then.

ducktastical March 17 2010, 22:47:29 UTC

Gotcha!

So currently, Ahiru is literally all dressed up with no where to go. xD

sword_and_quill March 17 2010, 23:10:02 UTC

Well, I'll be entirely honest here. I'm really concerned with how rushed this is. There's little or no development between them whatsoever since she returned. She only just returned to the City a few weeks ago and she's already likes him even without all of her memories from before ( ... )

ducktastical March 18 2010, 01:22:53 UTC

I'll be honest, too: from the moment "Rue" started encouraging her to move forward, I didn't think you'd be okay with it nor did I think it would happen right now. In fact, the drama of her being silenced seems more powerful than the confession, in my opinion.

As for the lack of development, I agree completely, but do not agree with her having nothing to feel with him. The difference is that she has no memories of her life in the city, but vivid memories of everything she felt prior to her entry and during the time he was gone. I can imagine that, without any friends to talk to on her own as a duck and of course without him, she had a lot of time to focus on herself and sort things out for herself... She didn't have anyone to help her figure our her feelings, so while I feel as though she still has very mild feelings fir Mytho, she also has feelings for Fakir based on her past with him.

As everything else stands, however, I agree!

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mroowwwrr March 28 2010, 02:00:19 UTC

Hey there~ I've been stalking the Tutu cast in poly, and while I've really enjoyed the interactions between them, I thought I'd drop off a few comments for you to consider.

Ahiru's voice isn't quite there. When I read her posts, I don't think of Ahiru. She seems very Tutu-esque instead, with a larger vocabulary and more complicated diction. It's difficult to really grasp Ahiru's typical naivete or childishness in her entries, and she seems far more mature than Ahiru really is, even if she is older than she was in the series. Maybe you can benefit from a canon review just to refresh yourself on her behavior and speech patterns or something? She also seemed quite adept at the use of electronics on her first try. ^^;;

I'd be glad to offer any clarifications on my comments if you want, and I'm sure your canon-mates would be happy to help as well. Good luck!

ducktastical March 28 2010, 03:23:52 UTC

Ack, I've been feeling that way a bit myself. I keep forgetting her stutters - I do it occasionally but not enough... I do, however, want her to be a bit more mature as she has, based on Fakir, Rue and Mytho's absence, had to be alone for quite sometime. But definitely I agree, I do need to let her spazz and be young at heart!

As for the electronics, if you see her first couple posts, they're... amateur at best. Haha. I will keep that in mind though.

faithin_you March 28 2010, 02:21:47 UTC

Hi! I've really enjoyed watching the PT cast here for a while, and I was happy to find out they've got an Ahiru again. Kudos for taking her on--she can be a handful of a muse.

I do have a few suggestions for how you could work on your portrayal of her. First, I agree with what Mr. Cat up there said about her voice--especially lately, it's been off. Ahiru really shouldn't be so eloquent; it's a trait of Tutu's that was almost definitely supposed to serve as a contrast to Ahiru, so it really doesn't work to have Ahiru that way. Also, echoing the sentiment that she seems a little too mature. Ahiru is remarkable for ... well, basically being the spaz to end all spazzes. I'm finding your Ahiru is a little too calm and composed. Remember that it's a duck you're playing. ;)

I'd be happy to talk more about any of this, or explain if anything I said didn't make sense. Thanks for listening!

ducktastical March 28 2010, 03:26:19 UTC

You're telling me - it's real tricky!

I guess after the Tutu curse I never really got back to her roots. If I really wanted to make an excuse for myself, I'd say that it's her "trying to accept the city for what it is" but that is a bunch of a crap, haha. Thank you for the comments; I'll try and fix her up!