5x07: The Rift

Jul 14, 2008 23:03

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persiflage_1 July 15 2008, 07:02:06 UTC
Loved this! Especially:

Martha's silent for a long moment. "Jack," she says.

He looks up at her. "Yeah?"

"If we spend enough time telling ourselves we're all right," Martha says, making sure she stays looking at Jack as she asks it, "that living so long, or surviving that year, or fighting the Daleks the way we did -- that it's fine, does it eventually become true?"

Jack considers this for a moment; then he grins, brilliant and painful. "Yes it does, Martha Jones. Of course it does."

Martha/Jack friendship is a wonderful thing!

There's nothing specific in the flare, just a lot of Doctorishness, which is quite enough to make him feel he needs a long bath just to scrub off the phantom hair gel.

That last bit made me giggle madly - but I love the idea of "Doctorishness" coming off our favourite Time Lord!

But I think you've a typo here:

where his fingertips were glow in a gold impression for a moment before fading

Either the "were" isn't necessary, or it should be "glowing"...

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therru July 15 2008, 12:42:06 UTC
Re the "typo": It sort of made me falter, too, before I could sort it out, but what I think it says is "Martha, watching closely, sees [the place where his fingertips were] glow in a gold impression for a moment before fading." "Were" as in "touched the surface of the box", type of thing.

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persiflage_1 July 15 2008, 13:12:51 UTC
Then I'd say it needs some commas to make that clearer...

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therru July 15 2008, 19:17:34 UTC
Well, there is no way you can put more commas in that sentence and keep it good English... And the author has changed it now, anyway. :)

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kathyh July 15 2008, 09:09:08 UTC
This continues to make me gobsmacked with awe. Martha's reaction to the Master, Martha and Jack friendship, all the interactions between the Doctor and the Master are all just wonderfully done. I hope Donna can get back now the Rift's sealed!

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littlehollyleaf July 15 2008, 09:15:09 UTC
Ooooh! Very good. LOVED Martha finding out about the Master over the phone, much fun. And very touching moment with the psychic connection at the end. You write telepathy/psychic communication VERY VERY well, I really get a sense of the emotions involved.

Basically - still loving this, I'll be with you till the end! :D

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fahye July 15 2008, 09:44:43 UTC
skjahdhsdsa pulling a rift back together! his type of doctoring! PHANTOM HAIR GEL.

That entire scene was so perfect I want to cut it out with scissors, stick it in my diary and scribble hearts on it with pink sparkly pens.

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manicr July 15 2008, 09:55:12 UTC
My face is frozen in a manic grin. That is how great this is.

I loved the Master answering the Doctor's mobile and getting a peek of his mind as well. And the hair gel comment! XD

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