Story Critique Requested!

[dyrecorn]

So... I do write, and I've been trying to get off my ass more and put some of that material out there.

I wrote this yesterday. It's a little over 2000 words, so it's not a long read. Critiques and comments requested!

Comments

[smokierings]

It lives!
Creepy story. Strong atmosphere, as always.

[dyrecorn]

Thanks!