For koulagirl666: The Ring From Your Finger

[peppervl]

Disclaimer: The following is a work of fiction. The author has no knowledge of and is making no claims about the real-life activities of anyone depicted herein. This is for entertainment purposes only and no profit has been made.
Rating: The overall rating for this challenge is NC-17. Not all fics are, but some will be.
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Comments

[lancelot_luv05]

oh wow, this was amazing. i will admit the spider freaked me out but that's cause im really afraid of spiders. this was just wow is all i can really say.

[alliwantisanelf]

I'm glad you liked it.

Sounds like you really understand what Orlando was feeling. That makes it even scarier, doesn't it?

Thanks for reading!

[obselizabeth]

i've got to tell you how incredibly wonderful this story was. i sat at the edge of my seat the whole time!

[alliwantisanelf]

*gets you one of Viggo's shoes so you can squash any spiders that might come frolicking by*

Thanks, luv! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Hope the nightmares haven't been too intense???

[alliwantisanelf]

I know exactly what you mean!

I'm glad the intensity came through for you. This is a far cry from my usual humor genre, so I was a bit worried I wouldn't get the Dom/sub emotions right.

Thanks for reading!

[koulagirl666]

Thank you so much; this was worth waiting for.

I love the complexity you've given the opening paragraphs, especially through your use of description. It sucked me right in and helped me feel like I was experiencing some of the things you showed Viggo doing. The depth of their relationship here is obvious even though the cracks are showing, but to see it break apart is devastating, especially since you worded the ending so simply, as if it really was the natural and only consequence to Viggo's actions. In a way, he neglected Orlando just as much as Orlando disrespected his orders.

Fantastic work! I feel like I must know you somehow because you hit so many of my buttons here, but I'm afraid I can't guess who you are. I look forward to finding out who you are so that I can read more of your work.

[koulagirl666]

alliwantisanelf, you're brilliant. Thank you so much! =)

[alliwantisanelf]

I'm so glad you liked it!

It's a bit out of my usual genre (humor/actionadventure), and I don't really think I did justice to the D/s situation. My brain is entertaining a sequel, but the emotional component isn't really there. Needs researching, y'know?

Would you be willing to do some emailing with me, and help me learn about getting into headspace for the Dom partner? I tend toward being a switch (or mostly a dom/bottom! ha!)when I write.

Thanks so much for your fantastic words of encouragement!

Love,

al

[koulagirl666]

I thought you wrote the D/s situation very well - especially working with Viggo who's kind of dancing on the edge of being straight out abusive rather than Dominant.

Be happy to help out in any way I can =) - koulagirlxvx -at- gmail.com -
I'm submissive IRL so when I write from a Dominant POV it takes a while to get right as well.

*k

[raphaha]

This was really amazing, I loved it!!
Are there any chances for a sequel???

[alliwantisanelf]

Hearing you loved it really makes me happy!

koulagirl666 says she's willing to help me out if I can get a sequel together, so maybe so?

Thank you for reading!

[stormatdusk]

The forecast for tonight has left me on edge, since my pet has gone missing longer than the moon

out partying with his new fuckbuddies for hours, totally oblivious to the oncoming storm
in more ways that one....

kohl...rimmed...orlan... *dies*

the flex of wiry tendons as he wills himself not to fight me physically for its possession
gorgeous.

as long as my thumb, and even bigger around
*pulls feet up off floor*

The steel ribs have left deep, red-striped indentations in his smooth skin
*nnnnngghhs pervertedly*

Gave no quarter to any of the hell we’ve already been through together, which pales in comparison to the hell of right now

i still don't know how you did this, when you did this, but i remain damn impressed. *salutes* *kisses* *begs for sequel*

[alliwantisanelf]

I'd hate to be the one who had to explain those skinned raw wrists and the marks on Orlando's chest to the paramedics. The spider bite's bad enough. Of course, most ER personnel will tell you there's not much they haven't seen....

Thanks for helping me keep my nose to the grindstone on this one. It was a stretch, but a GOOD ONE!

How much of that sequel do you think I can get written in, say, 20 minutes? Eh? *wink* I'll need some prompt words, I think....

[stormatdusk]

see? the spider bit vig, too. maybe that'll give you some ideas. vig gets pink eye, orlando feels sorry for him...?

yes, i am playing with icon-making tonight. so much for that last casino sitting there...

[alliwantisanelf]

Hahaha. He looks like pink-eyed Haldir the albino pussycat got him...only Hal has blue eyes and pink ears and nose!