humble attempt at poetry

[ec0]

She is the cloud in everyone's silver lining
She is the blemish that won't go away
She is the sunset of every dull day
And the thought not the act of giving...

Empty at any given time
I mimic thoughts in rhyme
ideal is gone
How will you face dawn
without an action is a crime.

Comments

[eccentrophile]

i like it!
especially: She is the sunset of every dull day
the first verse sounds like it should be put to music

[ec0]

thanks gina, i called you yesterday, your grandma said you had to go to a funeral...hope everything is okay
i can't make it to kingston, so i hope i see you soon in 2004!

Imma steal it!

[popplagid]

I'm not really, but I think it's good. :)

wow

[junebugg33]

your really good

Re: wow

[ec0]

thanks! i was feeling inspired by billy:)