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anonymous July 9 2014, 03:31:56 UTC
Absolutely perfect and utterly charming.

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electricalgwen July 11 2014, 00:14:52 UTC
Thank you so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed it. :)

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plumlush July 9 2014, 05:01:54 UTC
You made these two so believable, Jensen as a cocky-as-hell F1 driver and Jared as an adorable surgeon.

I also loved that the ending felt off-tempo. We weren't sure if there'd be a bad guy reveal, or if there'd be fallout and mayhem from whoever sabotaged Jen in the first place, so in the last act I found myself in this weird place where I didn't know what the climax scene would be. Way to keep us guessing!

Thanks for sharing this! Great job!

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electricalgwen July 11 2014, 00:43:07 UTC
I'm really glad you enjoyed this, and that the characters felt believable! Makes me very happy. :D

I'm glad the ending worked for you. Initially, I'd assumed the sabotage would be a bigger part of the story, but (unusually for me) the story kept being about the relationship rather than the plot, and that kind of faded into the background. It's nice to hear that the imbalance didn't act as too much of a disadvantage.

Thanks again for reading and commenting!

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bugmcsnug July 9 2014, 08:30:43 UTC
Great story! I really enjoyed it :)

Thanks for sharing!

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electricalgwen July 12 2014, 01:31:31 UTC
I'm very glad you liked it! Thanks for letting me know. :)

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soncnica July 9 2014, 11:08:23 UTC
You had me at F1 (its a weakness, I know) and then the doctor!Jared was just a bonus and I read the story with one breath and it was good and the pacing was fast, but not too fast and I loved that Jared took his job very seriously BUT I am wondering who wanted to kill Jensen? Will there be a sequel or timestamps or something? Because Jensen is still in danger so .. yeah, but anywho, I enjoyed the story!
Tnx for sharing
S.

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electricalgwen July 12 2014, 01:34:40 UTC
Wow, thank you, that is a wonderful compliment!

I hope there will be a timestamp. I'd thought the sabotage would be a larger part of the plot, but the relationship rather took over the story!

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ferrous_wheeler July 9 2014, 11:15:57 UTC
That was wonderful, and such impressive detail! Any chance for a timestamp because I'd really like to know who was trying to kill Jensen.
Thank you for the great read :)

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electricalgwen July 12 2014, 01:35:45 UTC
Thanks for reading, and for letting me know! I'm really glad you enjoyed it.

There is certainly a chance for a timestamp, as I'd like to explore that a little more too. I think I have to recover from this first, though. ;)

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