ill think of a title later.

[elementaldragon]

well, um......there once was a boy, and ordinary, down to earth, shy boy, who would never,ever, get into trouble. He was perfect, really, he had marvelous grades, he could play the sax, and sang in a lusious baritone voice. He played soccer, and was tall and lean, with strait white teeth, vivid green eyes and thick and shiny black hair. But, yes

Comments

[elementaldragon]

aaa....maybe i have so much trouble with tenses!

[european_ninja7]

I think its a good start for a story. You've got good descriptions of the characters, just watch out that what you say about the character doesnt contradict other descriptions as it goes along (ex. drummer brings both the child in everyone but knew of the horrors of life) Other than that, its good

[henrystanley]

i read this while stoned and it was strange.

[elementaldragon]

ahahahahahahahahahhahahahahahhahahhahhaahhahaahhhahahahahaha!!!!!