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?! Nathan's fine at the end of the story. ellakite April 11 2017, 12:50:18 UTC
The young boys are all still playing in the shallow part of the lake "without a care in the world" when the tale ends. The commotion took place out in the center of the lake, and I explicitly said that the boys in the lake had to stay in the shallow (safe) area.

Still, based on your comment I made some minor edits. Please go back and re-read the tale. (HINT: Pay attention to the number of geese mentioned.)

PS: Thank you for the feedback!

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Re: ?! Nathan's fine at the end of the story. ellakite April 12 2017, 13:48:10 UTC
Sure. Hey, I've made similar goofs before I've had my daily dose of caffeine, so I totally sympathize!

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tonithegreat April 11 2017, 22:22:40 UTC
I want to know about your head dent! I can take it!

Also, I enjoyed this slightly dark take on the camp trope. Sounds like Ben's got future adventures in store.

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You asked for it: ellakite April 12 2017, 04:51:46 UTC
RE: You asked for it: tonithegreat April 12 2017, 17:01:56 UTC
Oh dang. That is a harsh story! Poor five-year-old you! I'm so glad you survived to tell the tale.

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I warned you that you wouldn't like it. ellakite April 12 2017, 17:48:28 UTC
That's exactly why I handed off my responsibilities to Ben: Because no one will *LISTEN* to my warnings anymore...

Thank you for the sympathy.

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shadowwolf13 April 12 2017, 04:11:53 UTC
Perfectly creepy!!

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ellakite April 12 2017, 13:49:22 UTC
Yes. Yes, I am.

Or were you talking about the story? ;)

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shadowwolf13 April 12 2017, 13:50:40 UTC
I'll never tell! ;)

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dmousey April 12 2017, 14:48:05 UTC
Nicely done sir! I enjoyed this from start to end! Hugs and peace~~~ Oh and loved the Chicken Foot Woman... :)

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ellakite April 12 2017, 18:01:34 UTC
I'm glad you enjoyed my tale... but don't *EVER* say that name again! You shouldn't even *THINK* of that name!

part of that campfire story's tradition is that you're not supposed to even mention the antagonist except when telling the tale at the fireside. partially it's because the story-teller is one of her few survivors, and any mention of her is deeply upsetting to the story-teller... but it's also implied that mentioning her will somehow attract her. as the saying goes, speak of the devil and (s)he shall appear...

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halfshellvenus April 13 2017, 06:51:08 UTC
It sounds as if sharks are about the only thing those kids are safe from in that campground. Monster squid! Chicken-Lady (that sounded surprisingly creepy, but maybe it's a Baba Yaga variant)!

Body parts strewn around the campground...

Those Boy Scout years traumatized you, didn't they? Or maybe they weren't quite exciting enough, and you're improving them for future generations. :)

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There are no sharks in the lake because the squid ate them all. ellakite April 13 2017, 15:16:11 UTC
On the other hand, the reason why I insist my Scouts all stay indoors during violent thunderstorms while we're at that camp has nothing to do with lightning. Where do you think the idea for the SHARKNADO movie series came from?

And how many times do I have to say it: You shouldn't *EVER* mention that woman's name! IT'S IMPORTANT THAT YOU DON'T EVEN *THINK* OF HER NAME!

i do have a lot of good memories regarding my scouting experiences ... but i have seen a lot of ugly stuff in my time, too. people behaving badly for stupid, petty reasons. so it felt good to 'talk trash' for a bit, to let my anger out...

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