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[fic] State of Mind - Chapter Six

Aug 02, 2010 11:31

Title: State of Mind
Author: elric_ward
Rating: M! Naughty language here :|
Genre: Survival.
Word count:2,829
Summary: Ward never liked the world, but he was content. Then life decided to turn things around and make it difficult for him.
Author Notes:Numero Six already. Ward has no survival instincts. Nada. Zilch. Also trying different views. Anyway, a couple ( Read more... )

[fic] state of mind

Comments 4

askerian August 2 2010, 03:20:43 UTC

When the envy popped up i was all OH SHIT. XD;; Ward is the unluckiest edward ever. Then again he did get saved just in time. XD Am enjoying the interactions with the pack. The grooming was cute too. Pff. Good luck to Fons, he'll seriously need it.

elric_ward August 2 2010, 07:51:42 UTC

Thanks!
Seriously, if Ward was just more careful of his surroundings, most of these things would be avoided!

I feel so bad for Fons, everytime I write him.

deepgreen18 August 2 2010, 14:19:09 UTC

Ooh, things are moving along. That Envy was rather scary; I felt nervous for Ward, and was so glad when Sting showed up. For some reason, I was surprised that the Mustang was capable of fighting well. Note to self: mentally unbalanced does not equal incompetent. Your little character sketches clarified Sting's problem for me, the majority of his pack is dead. He's talking to his former Hawkeye, isn't he?

Yes, yes, yes! Fons is a smart cookie, good for him figuring Ward out.

Two small things: Fons popped his head into the entryway, smiling again. <‘I bought food!’> Did you mean "brought"? Otherwise, that Fons is a smarter guy than I thought!

Ward frowned up at the Alfons. What was he wuffing at himself for, and why was he so close to Ward? I was confused by this sentence the first two times I read it. Who is wuffing at whom? I assumed at the beginning that Ward felt the wuffing and thus referred to himself as himself, but I then figured out that you are going for completely-clueless!Ward and he was talking about Fons ( ... )

elric_ward August 2 2010, 23:53:44 UTC

Yo! Got it on the nail, poor Sting :( Ward doesn't know just yet :C

I fixed those things :D If it didn't make sense to you it may not make sense to others. :D

It will end on Chapter 15 (or 16, depends on how long chapter 13 and 14 end up being). Buuuuuut. There is a sequel. I actually split the story in two since the latter half has sooo much less to do with survival. :D It's unknown how long the sequel will be.