[fic] State of Mind - Chapter Twelve

[elric_ward]

Title: State of Mind
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[askerian]

Socute. X3 And ahh, poor Mustang.

[elric_ward]

Thank you~

he gets better-ish?

[deepgreen18]

I cannot believe our discussion from the last chapter lasted until the next update!

Up front, I have absolutely nothing to correct. It had to happen sometime, huh?

Ward's thought process in this chapter fascinated me. For example:

Ward frowned as he turned his head and assessed his new ‘master’.

This is so telling of where he has come from, and then Havo goes and completely changes his mind about it! I like how independent he's becoming. Also, this: He kicked the Havoc back for good measure. made me laugh. (I still miss Fons, though. Bring back the Fons!)

I'm so excited that you're adding more to the lore of FMA Zoofic! Mustangs and Edwards cooperating in the wild together. Did you intend to do that from the beginning?

[elric_ward]

Yay~ That must mean I'm doing something mostly right! :D

Fons comes back!

I can't recall originally if I had them cooperating from the start. I know there was definitely meant to be a kind of conflict from choosing between the Mustang and Alfons.

Wait, I have old files. Yus! I never got further than deciding their will be conflict originally. I know I wrote the ideas for chapter 8-14 not long after I started posting, so I guess I decided then.

[truly_wished]

I'm really happy to see that you are continuing the story. It's fun and well written.

[elric_ward]

Thanks! n________________n