[fic] Our Environment - Chapter Three

[elric_ward]

One yellow eye opened halfway and Ward let out a long yawn as he stretched his arms. His body felt so weighted down. An idle glance down showed the sleeping Heiderich draped across his legs and half his chest, quiet whuffs released with each breath as his companion - mate? - clung to him. Carefully Ward wiggled his way out from under Fons’

Comments

[truly_wished]

These are always so cute and funny!

[elric_ward]

Thanks! This story is all about cute/fluffys and maybe some silly

[darthneko]

Awww! I only just caught up on your stories, and I really love this. Ward and Fons are so cute. And hurray for humane Elric extraction from public places! Heeee.

[deepgreen18]

This was a nice chapter. The poor dears, not knowing what the heck is going on. I didn't really understand the "ropes" that the volunteers were using to restrain Ward (and neither did Ward, which is the point, I guess), did you have something specific in mind? They're so cute and loving, makes me feel the warm and fuzzies.

A couple mistakes I noticed:
One of the humans shuffled awkwardly and gave a couch, the sudden sound startling them out of their bewilderment. Did you mean shout? Also, I think there should be a period after that, so that "the sudden sound" is it's own sentence.

The human-predators were doing something weird with some ropes. They had tied one around his wrist then stood off to the side, pulling it taught and keeping his arm stretched out. Should be "taut", if you want tension, not education.

The humans on either side kept his hands spread apart. The Elric tried to bring his hands close together, but the ropes around each wrist kept them separate. They had restrained him! He tried to strike out in response, but