FIC: Occultis Lacrima 3/3

[elshadowboxer]

TITLE: Occultus Lacrima

ARTIST: Shimera

AUTHOR: Electric Light Shadowboxer

RATING: R for language and possible disturbing imagery.

WORD COUNT: 13,662

SUMMARY: Things haven’t been easy for the brothers Winchester. Now something is wrong with Dean. Sam may be able to save him, and the world, but it just might cost him his life.

WARNINGS: Bad language

Comments

[hoodietime]

Oh, wow. I should totally be in bed but I couldn't stop reading this! ;)

What a cool storyline! This was angsty, and intriguing, and creepy, and the way you wrote Sam and Dean's relationship was just beautiful. Awesome ending too! Thanks for the great read.

[elshadowboxer]

Thank you so much! This was my first crack at Supernatural fanfic so hearing that it was effective is a relief.

[hoodietime]

Oh, and I meant to add, while your fic masterlist links are fine, the links at the end of each chapter to the next one aren't working.

[geri]

Wow this was a good ending to what could have taken place had same not listen to cas, but angels do not play fair in wars and if driving dean insane all well and good the end justifies the means than he's certainly lucky that sam loves him as much as he does because dean was on the verge of giving his consent to micheal to become his vessel. Such a beautiful story and the art work is incredible as well.

[elshadowboxer]

Thank you so much! Shimera did such an awesome job on the art that it was really easy to get a story from it. I'm glad you liked it.

[marlowe78]

Interesting concept and I think Sam letting go of all his anger will indeed be part of 'how to stop the apocalypse'. It came a bit sudden for me, that ending, but you have a great style and that hellspeak as well as Michael torturing Dean in his head was a good idea (not for Dean, I would think)

[elshadowboxer]

Thank you. Yeah, the ending was sudden sort of sudden. Unfortunately that was a byproduct of my own lack of time and the timeframe of the challenge as well. I'm glad the rest worked for you though!

[sarcasticval]

Really interesting! You did a great job with the creepier parts, especially when we discovered what the Hellspeak translated into. Dark and twisted in the best possible way :)

I hope you don't mind a little bit of constructive criticism...do you use a beta reader? Nothing major, of course, but I noticed a few grammatical errors here and there, and I can tell you that an American guy would never in a million years say "snooker". All little things, though, and overall I enjoyed this story very much!

[elshadowboxer]

Thank you. I'm glad the creepiness translated well. I never mind con crit. Unfortunately, I do not have a beta reader. So all mistakes are mine. You read it over and over, but it's hard to catch everything yourself. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[sarcasticval]

Hey, if anything I learned a new word :)