Sir Leader is great!black_of_crownOctober 28 2011, 09:23:39 UTC
You did a good job. I loved when Deidara said 'I bomb things, un!' for some reason it made me laugh out loud. Like hes so excited to talk about his bombs even though hes in Sir Leader's scary chamber, lol.
I must admit I was kind of scared of your Pein, but then again, he is the evil leader, he would have to be like this. I can imagine Deidara would panic; it's normal, especially when faced with such an intimidating man.
I think you captured Deidara's feelings about being new very well. He is confused, scared, and curious at the same time, just like how everybody would feel when placed in a similar situation.
I think it's also reasonable Sasori is harsh to Deidara; after all, he's tired and all he wanted to do was go to sleep; and instead, he has to deal with someone who previously threatened him.
Interesting
anonymous
November 19 2011, 18:52:37 UTC
Re-Writing, hmm? That I admire and respect because I can honestly say I would most likely never have the patientence to do that with such a huge project, but I give you must best wishes. This story will surely live on no matter if it's in the original or in the new, so I cant wait for more.
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I'm totally starting to stalk you, ya know?
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I think you captured Deidara's feelings about being new very well. He is confused, scared, and curious at the same time, just like how everybody would feel when placed in a similar situation.
I think it's also reasonable Sasori is harsh to Deidara; after all, he's tired and all he wanted to do was go to sleep; and instead, he has to deal with someone who previously threatened him.
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I am eagerly looking forward to the rest.
Good night, I need sleep now.
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...Btw, 'sexual frustration ftw'? HELL YEAH!
Hehe, forever and onwards-
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