Harper drabble, take one

[emeraldmouse]

Harper leaned against the counter. Casually. Coolly. To collect his thoughts. Certainly not because he couldn’t stand up straight without support

Comments

[mls17]

Once again you demonstrate how less can indeed be more--I don't know who Harper is, but he intrigues me. Your description of his drinking is very vivid-and very easy for me to imagine. I can practically hear the ice clinking against the glass, and combined with the ticking of the clock, the overall effect is solitude, maybe even loneliness. The ring of whiskey forming a frown is also effective, and again, tag-teaming it with the accusing clock, the effect is also one of disapproval or even disdain.
I don't know what Harper is going through, but your writing allows the reader to empathize with him to some degree or other. Nicely done. I don't know why, but the phrases at the beginning "Casually. Coolly. To collect his thoughts."--the use of words beginning with "c" link the fragments together rather snugly.

[emeraldmouse]

You have read something with him before. Jonathon Harper is the character that had the confrontation with his wife in the park.

I'm glad you liked it/picked up on little details. Thanks again for the concrit.