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emilianadarling

Fic: "Until My Dying Breath", Chapter Four -- Part One. Kurt/Blaine Vampire AU.

Oct 20, 2011 13:47

Hello, all! :3 I've been formatting this chapter throughout my classes all morning -- and even a little bit on the bus on my way here! It's made for an interesting ratio of information absorbed to information ignored, for sure. Thank you so much for reading, and I hope you enjoy!

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Title: "Until My Dying Breath" -- Chapter Four
Author: emilianadarling
Fandom: ( Read more... )

fanfic, vampire!verse, glee, kurt/blaine, fic

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emilianadarling October 22 2011, 03:22:28 UTC

Aha, sorry to disrupt your sleep, hon!! D: I'm honoured you chose me over sleep, haha!

Oh, thank you so much about the deja-vu -- it's such an incredibly real feeling, isn't it, especially in dreams? That tugging certainty that you know this, you do, you just have to remember. I'm so happy you liked that aspect! And I was hoping that "Oh, there you are..." would have an impact. :/ What a bastardization of that line. I'm happy it packed a punch for you; it's so meaningful for us Klainers, isn't it? Of course Blaine incorporates it into the dream. D:

Oh! And goodness, thank you so much about my metaphores and images! Sometimes I worry, because I tend to go for metaphors for the feel of them instead of the actual literal meaning, but I'm delighted that they're coming across well!

And heehee, oh Blainers. XD I'm glad you enjoyed his confusion over Kurt and the internet. But, like, why wouldn't Kurt use the internet? He can't go out in the day, he has to find something to do. XD

;D <--- my face at your enjoyment of the zipper line. OH ( ... )

heyblaine October 20 2011, 23:03:53 UTC

excuse me while i ASDFGHJASKDALSKASDWEUWDSF

okay now i will go read it (and then try to actually leave a somewhat coherent comment afterward - god, i'm so bad at commenting, shame on me ;_; ...so, well, if i don't, i still wanted to let you know that i at least read and enjoy (and love and worship) this story so, so much <3)!

emilianadarling October 22 2011, 03:24:03 UTC

Then I shall have to AKDNKSHDLHDHLDLS right back! :D I hope you enjoyed the chapter!!

Aha, I've been making an effort in the past months to leave better feedback too, actually! What I've found works best is just doing it when I finish the story and not waiting, and just spewing all of my incoherency onto the page. Getting comments from flaily people is definitely awesome! But in any case, thank you SO much for letting me know that you read and enjoy, sweetie! That means so much to me!!

heyblaine October 22 2011, 12:49:56 UTC

Ah, well, the thing is that English isn't my native language, so when I'm on a post-reading-an-extremely-good-fic-high (is that a thing? can you be that? XD) and I make flaily comments they usually... literally make no sense, hah.

But now I'm taking my time to do it! :D This story is... wow. I just want to love you forever (I'm creepy, sorry), because - this? This is everything I could have ever asked for from a vampire fic, and I've waited so long for it to show up in this fandom. The only ones I've read with Kurt or Blaine as a vampire have been waaay too Twilight-esque for my taste (and really, no bashing on people writing those stories whatsoever, it's just not what I want to read, I want, what's in my eyes, real vampires, and my, you succeed with this!).

The sexual tension building between them right from the start and Kurt so easily being this creature you've made him into - because really, he fills these shoes so well, Mr. Kurt Hummel was obviously meant to be a vampire, mhmmm - it's all perfect, and I, just... I feel so ( ... )

amordemealma October 20 2011, 23:10:51 UTC

So I've gotten in the habit of opening your story twice in two windows. In one window I read the story. In the other I open the comment box, and when I need to, I stop reading and start writing. because with your writing, I just know that I'll forget something Important I wanted to say because every few paragraphs you write something that Frickin blows my mind and I can no longer remember the last thing I read that frickin blew my mind ( ... )

amordemealma October 20 2011, 23:11:20 UTC

Okay, information overload again. let's see what I can remember ( ... )

emilianadarling October 22 2011, 08:41:46 UTC

And oh, Kurt. Kurt is so very unfair in the way he approaches things sometimes, isn’t he? :/ Of course he knows that Blaine hasn’t had a good sleep; he’s been bloody well making it so that he doesn’t have any good sleeps on purpose! And it’s a question, too, that is ordinarily filled with such care and love, and Kurt has done such a job of putting him on edge. Oh, Kurt. So glad you’re loving him in all his manipulative glory!

because I'm sure he would have hated any evidence of a murder to lead back to Blaine. <-- Mmmmm, very well said. Police make things complicated and difficult and annoying, and when he’s sending a piece of evidence part and parcel to his victim’s house, it’s probably best to make sure that no body is found. Just in case. And especially not with her heart ripped out, good lord, that would make headlines. But I think you’re probably quite right about this; someone random who wouldn’t be missed. Much simpler that way.

Kurt was definitely trying to ingrain some habits into Blaine, for sure. Always be on the alert ( ... )

emilianadarling October 22 2011, 08:23:15 UTC

I absolutely love your dual-window system, hon!! XD You and Looney have it down to a fine art! Thank you so much for taking the time to interrupt your reading of each chapter to do that, lovely, honestly. <3 I’m so happy that you feel there’s enough of interest in each chapter to make you do that! (Also, oh my gosh, super-long comment!! You’re amazing!) I should start doing that with the stories with longer chapters that I read, actually; I always lose track of things I want to say, by the end; your system makes so much sense!

Wow! This is such an in-depth analysis of this dream! Well done, you! :D I’m delighted that you enjoyed the fact that we get to see this scene again through a bit of a different lens; I feel as though it’s such a significant moment for both of them that it makes perfect sense for Blaine to dwell on it in this way. I mean... it’s when everything changed. Getting to examine it through the fuzzy lens of the dream world was also so fantastic. Where things appear, and you know something is off, and it’s familiar but ( ... )

loonylevicorpus October 21 2011, 05:42:53 UTC

“Oh, there you are,” sneers Kurt, that beautifully high voice dancing on the night air as Blaine whimpers and trembles in front of him. The claws clench hard into Blaine’s shoulders, excruciating and all-consuming, and Blaine cries out in agony. He blinks, and the innocent face is gone, replaced by the twisted features of the monster in front of him. Growling, Kurt (the monster is Kurt, Kurt is the monster, they’re the same) moves in so that their faces are right up in front of each other, his lips ghosting over Blaine’s as his hisses the next words. “I’ve been looking for you forever.”

( ... )

cassidychase October 21 2011, 07:08:25 UTC

Just something to discuss, about when Blaine was telling Kurt that he had been asleep the last time that Kurt called. I didn't really think of it as an apology to Kurt, but more of a justification and maybe an apology to the woman who died.

It looks like Kurt took it as Blaine trying to make him feel guilty for killing someone when Blaine hadn't answered his phone(Later when he likens humans to bugs). Which I don't think was Blaine's conscious decision... we don't really know here. I don't think Blaine would consciously decide to try and guilt Kurt for fear of who Kurt might take his anger out on. Gosh this story is so compelling isn't it XD

loonylevicorpus November 4 2011, 00:27:15 UTC

I'm so sorry I haven't replied to this! I love your thoughts, and I think that it's completely justified to say that we're both right. He's certainly saying it as an apology to the woman, almost like a confession, and I think he is apologizing to Kurt because he's so terrified of Kurt's wrath.

Kurt taking it as a guilt trip is AWESOME and I never thought of it that way. And maybe Kurt is trying to convince himself that he really does think of humans only as bugs? I wonder if he's ever been this involved with his prey before. Maybe he's getting uncomfortable with how attached he's becoming.

emilianadarling November 3 2011, 23:40:12 UTC

Woooo! Sorry for the long wait on my response to this, bb!! My Uni is going crazy and it hasn't stopped yet. @_@ Autumn is always such a crazy time for me; a million apologies! Rest assured, I absolutely LOVE your feedback as much as always!!!

First of all, AHAHAHA perfect gif response to that particular paragraph!! XD Aheeeee, I'm so happy to make you freak out over the use of that particular line. It's the ultimate Klaine line, the one that we cling to and cherish and love -- so of course it's important within Blaine's own mind, as well. Of course he puts the words right into Kurt's mouth. And of course they come out twisted and wrong and sick and awful. Just.... mmmm, yes, thank you so much for that reaction. <3

I was actually really wondering how you would react to this nightmare, since it isn't as elegant as the past two have been. But I'm absolutely over the moon that you enjoyed it; I think that feeling of familiarity in dreams is at once so widely shared and so intimidating and scary to me that I just had to revisit this ( ... )

cassidychase October 21 2011, 06:57:07 UTC

Oh F**** fuck... that dream sequence.. @.@ shit when you slipped in the "There you are etc". That's like one of my favourite lines from Blaine ever and you used it there and !!!! Chills ( ... )

cassidychase October 21 2011, 06:57:45 UTC

I don't even know what to say about the phone sex.... it was hot for sure, but the wrongness and how much hold Kurt has over Blaine is so scary. Kurt got off on Blaine choking out Kurt name. I'm like, shit, omfg whine whine. Must find out what the hell Kurt actually thinks. It's all so intentionally ambiguous I just want to take off the Blaine eyes and see what the hell is happening objectively. I NEED to know what Kurt is thinking and what this game is going to entail ( ... )

emilianadarling November 4 2011, 00:08:15 UTC

Completely agreeing with you about that particular interaction, though; it's... Blaine isn't immune to how it makes his body feel, no, but the entire situation is very creepy and very, very manipulative and unsettling indeed. Kurt has so much hold over Blaine, but at the same time he clearly wants him very badly or he wouldn't be going to all of these lengths. You're very right that Blaine's eyes, too, are very much biased and unfocused in this whole matter. He sees things in a way that aren't always exactly accurate, poor bb.

And oh, yes, Kurt is so very neutral and stone-faced about a lot of this, isn't he? And Blaine isn't trying to dig deeper, and it just leaves us all dangling. I'm so happy that you're enjoying this, and that you liked the sneaky little dream snippets, too!!

As always, thank you SO MUCH for the lovely comments, honey! I hope you enjoy Chapter Five!!

emilianadarling November 4 2011, 00:04:43 UTC

Whew!!! Sorry for the long wait on this response, honey!! It's been a very, very crazy couple of weeks for me, and it doesn't look like it's going to get better any time soon. <.< Mid-October-December is always very hard and busy for me at school, and most of my fandom time has been going into writing Chapter Five. But I'm VERY grateful for you taking the time to respond, as always!

Mmmmm, oh, I'm so happy that little line had such an impact. <3 It's funny, isn't it? We as Klainers have such identification with that one little set of words, and seeing it used like this makes us all automatically recoil. And I totally know where you're coming from with 'if Blaine had been killed there, he would have been spared a great deal of trauma'. SO true; it would have been horrible and awful, but fast. The way it's worked out, with everything being dragged out and extended? Is really so much worse. That scene is truly where everything begins for real; the beginning of what went wrong ( ... )