Fic: Beneath the Mountains Music Woke -- Chapter One, Thorin Oakenshield/Bilbo Baggins

[emilianadarling]

Title: Beneath the Mountains Music Woke -- Chapter One (also available on AO3)
Author: Emiliana Darling
Fandom: The Hobbit (2012)
Pairing: Bilbo Baggins/Thorin Oakenshield
Rating: R
Word Count: 5,700
Contains: Angst, slow build romance, misunderstandings, confused emotions, cultural differences, class differences, possessiveness/jealousy,

Comments

[mithen]

Oh, very nice! I love your Bilbo-voice, you capture his sort of diffident yet direct way of talking so well. His comment about the stew being...stew-like, I can totally see that, as well as his chatter about the healing herbs (is he a bit nervous, one wonders?) ^-^ Oh, and that little wrinkle between his eyebrows, yes! And his voice contrasts so nicely with Thorin's very stern, formal internal monologue, like this:

In many ways, Thorin’s entire life had been defined by his mistakes; they had shaped him like the smith shapes hot iron, fashioning him into the man he was and the king he could not yet truly be.

Oh, yes, this. Very much this.

Looking forward to more! *bounces*

[emilianadarling]

Thank you so very much! :D I'm so very pleased that you enjoyed Bilbo's voice in this; he's such a quirky little character to write, with his stew-like stew and rambling. I really wanted to make sure that Bilbo's voice was as accurate as possible, especially since it -- much like Bilbo himself -- has the ability to lighten Thorin's severity.

Also, IT MAKES ME SO HAPPY THAT YOU POINTED OUT THAT THE WRITING STYLE IS SEVERE BECAUSE IT'S THORIN'S INTERNAL MONOLOGUE. :D :D :D Yes yes yes, that's exactly it! If this was set inside Bilbo's head, it wouldn't be nearly so stiff and formal. OH THORIN. (Also, so glad you enjoyed that line. :D)

Thanks so much for the lovely feedback!

[foxrafer]

I really like this. I can hear the characters very clearly in both the dialogue and their actions, especially Bilbo, and you've created a really nice foundation for the rest of the story.

[emilianadarling]

Thank you so very much! :D The fact that the character voices and mannerisms seem accurate to you makes me very happy indeed. I'm so glad you're enjoying it so far!

[loonylevicorpus]

oh my goodness I'm so excited right now it's been so long since I've liveblogged one of your fics :D here we go!

"had left him with a vague sense of resentment instead of an appreciation for its beauty. It had burned like bile at the back of his throat: here was a land untouched by war"

[loonylevicorpus]

"overwhelming and perfect in a way Thorin did not wish to question."

[emilianadarling]

Oh my goodness, I’M so excited right now! It’s been so long since I read/replied to one of your liveblogging comments, akjdhakjsghdlkjshd!!! NEVER CHANGE

[emilianadarling]

And yesssss, Thorin is a jealous dwarf. He just wants to CHERISH BILBO AND KEEP HIM SAFE and make sure no one else touches him like ever but he’s kind of bad at emotions?? And feelings??? And he has brilliant ideas like I SHOULD RIP OFF THAT CLOAK IN FRONT OF EVERYONE wait what no that’s probably a bad idea oh god I have no idea what I’m doing.

I’m so pleased that the stew-like comment has got such a favourable response. XD

Sounds like you don't need that Arkenstone so bad anymore, Thorin. You've got a new treasure to obsess over eh???? ehhhhh??????? ;D But seriously thinking about it dwarves must be insanely possessive of their significant others. <-- BASICALLY THOUGH, AM I RIGHT?? I am actually crazy-curious about how differently the conflict over the Arkenstone would have gone if Thorin and Bilbo had been in a relationship at the time. *plot bunny* BUT YEAH, it makes complete sense to me that dwarves would be ridiculously possessive over the people they love in the same way that they covet and hoard their gold and wealth. OH