Improvements to Expect in the BSR Rewrite
1. New prologue that develops some story elements a little better.
2. No more convoluted leaps of logic. (Golden Sedge? HE'S IN THE CAROLINAS IT IS CLEAR TO ME)
3. No more Strauss shoehorned in. Awesome!Emily will still get her moments.
4. No more vague subplot threads drifting around waiting to be tied up.
5. No more Elle ex Machina.
(+Gideon was gonna run off with Elle at the start of arc 3. Forgive me, I was apparently missing my brain.)
6. No more Hotch and Reid a step away from "I LOVE YOU MORE", "NO I LOVE *YOU* MORE!"
7. No more floods of fangirling by proxy on the parts of Emily, J.J., and Garcia. Emily maybe a little.
8. No more Biblical hunt-and-peck. Consistency. CONSISTENCY.
9. Speaking of, a consistent Hatford who doesn't ping-pong between inept and calculating.
10. Less chapter after chapter of the same old thing in the second half. Bored me to tears.
11. No more YOU SAVED ME AND ALL SO LET'S MAKE OUT.
12. Less MEDICAL JARGON BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH.
13. No more month-long kidnapping. Kidnapping goodness yes. A month, no.
14. No more mess about barbiturates and seizures and things. Just like #8, keep it simple, keep it steady.
15. No more plot compromises for a timeline's sake. And no timeline compromises for plot's sake!
16. Less smarmy innocent smarm waff. Needs more real and dark and a tiny pinch of twisted early on.
17. No more jump from "oh I made out with you on the couch" to "OH I WANT YOU BUTTSEX NOW"
18. A consistent pre-fic timeline instead of pulling random conflicting info about Hatford out of my ass.
19. No more writing myself into a corner and giving up because the idea I spent a whole fic setting up fails.
20. No more clumsy title. It's as blocky as the plot and half as subtle. And fit like, three chapters. Blecch.
Well look at that. Thank God for hindsight, huh?
2. No more convoluted leaps of logic. (Golden Sedge? HE'S IN THE CAROLINAS IT IS CLEAR TO ME)
3. No more Strauss shoehorned in. Awesome!Emily will still get her moments.
4. No more vague subplot threads drifting around waiting to be tied up.
5. No more Elle ex Machina.
(+Gideon was gonna run off with Elle at the start of arc 3. Forgive me, I was apparently missing my brain.)
6. No more Hotch and Reid a step away from "I LOVE YOU MORE", "NO I LOVE *YOU* MORE!"
7. No more floods of fangirling by proxy on the parts of Emily, J.J., and Garcia. Emily maybe a little.
8. No more Biblical hunt-and-peck. Consistency. CONSISTENCY.
9. Speaking of, a consistent Hatford who doesn't ping-pong between inept and calculating.
10. Less chapter after chapter of the same old thing in the second half. Bored me to tears.
11. No more YOU SAVED ME AND ALL SO LET'S MAKE OUT.
12. Less MEDICAL JARGON BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH.
13. No more month-long kidnapping. Kidnapping goodness yes. A month, no.
14. No more mess about barbiturates and seizures and things. Just like #8, keep it simple, keep it steady.
15. No more plot compromises for a timeline's sake. And no timeline compromises for plot's sake!
16. Less smarmy innocent smarm waff. Needs more real and dark and a tiny pinch of twisted early on.
17. No more jump from "oh I made out with you on the couch" to "OH I WANT YOU BUTTSEX NOW"
18. A consistent pre-fic timeline instead of pulling random conflicting info about Hatford out of my ass.
19. No more writing myself into a corner and giving up because the idea I spent a whole fic setting up fails.
20. No more clumsy title. It's as blocky as the plot and half as subtle. And fit like, three chapters. Blecch.
Well look at that. Thank God for hindsight, huh?