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emptyfuneral

[public] original fiction

Feb 29, 2008 23:56

This is for picfor1000. I can't say that I have any deep love for this, but I also don't hate it. I'm used to living with my characters for a while; these ones just showed up for 1000 words and don't appear to be coming back. I've also never posted original fic for the general public so. . . I don't know. (Would you all be surprised if I said that this ( Read more... )

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geneli4 March 1 2008, 18:15:52 UTC

this is wonderful, so concrete and still there's something slippery about it, too, that sense of memory, maybe, layered all the way through.

emptyfuneral March 4 2008, 21:34:22 UTC

Well, hey, you make my fic sound far more impressive than I though it was. So thanks for that, and thanks for reading.

clarelondon March 1 2008, 18:18:27 UTC

I feel as if I stepped into someone's picture album... like I'm walking alongside Natasha... like I feel for Jude the way she does. And it's all happened at a single moment in time. Very clumsy comment, sorry, but I loved it, I felt it sneak into *me* rather than my reading skim over it. Lovely dialogue, and so much said behind the actual words.
Thanks for sharing!
^__^

emptyfuneral March 4 2008, 21:38:44 UTC

You may say it's clumsy but I think it makes sense, in theory at least. It seems far too complimentary to be applied to my own fic but I'll take it anyway. Thanks for reading.

wonderkid March 3 2008, 23:58:34 UTC

(why am i always late to everything...)

two things.

thing one: But there's nothing, just a shrug and a grin that bares that mysterious tooth once more, and "Maybe my mom'll cook us some dinner tonight."
the dynamic throughout this fic is absolutely lovely.

thing two(, which might be the close cousin of thing 1, come to think of it): you win at dialogue. it's very natural, could be taken out of anybody's life. minus the annoying um's and like's, anyway.

why did you hate this again? i wouldn't mind seeing more of these characters.

emptyfuneral March 4 2008, 21:43:48 UTC

you're focusing on the dialogue again? after eons of thinking i'm crap at that i'm realizing that maybe I'm not and maybe that's why i sometimes want to say the heck with whole stories and just write scripts.

i feel like i haven't spoken to you in forever. probably because i haven't. and maybe this isn't the best place to pick it up again. thanks heavens i thought of that before i said something stupid.

emptyfuneral March 23 2008, 21:51:53 UTC

why did you hate this again?
see, i never said i hated it. i just said i have no fondness for it. i tend to create characters and live with them for a while as i figure out their favorite foods and career ambitions and why they've never had a pet. none of that happened for these people and i'm sort of grateful that i wrote an isolated piece without getting attached.

'kay?

i came up with a really awesome quote for a random character the other day but i can't remember it. i hope i wrote it down.

wonderkid March 23 2008, 23:21:03 UTC

so your icon successfully talked me out of arguing my case on this one. instead i'm just going to sit here and stare at it.-- know how after a while, words start to look like they're spelled wrong, even though they're right? like much and bright and heaven. well, after a while that becomes a pretty awkward gesture. who goes around clutching people's heads, anyway? aside from xabi, i mean.

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