LJ Idol Season 11: Week 22 - Hiraeth

[encrefloue]

mixed

Come here.

Yes, right in the center.

Watch your step.

Don’t get snagged along the walls.

There. Do you feel that?

No?

Hm.

Oh, take off your flag.

Okay, how about now?

Not yet?

Your tongue-

scrub the language off of it.

No? Still nothing?

Well then, take off your skin.

Yeah, just take it off.

No, it’ll be fine.

I promise.

I promise!

Comments

[alycewilson]

Inventive and immersive. Well done.

[encrefloue]

Thank you so much! Glad that it could have some pull.

[alycewilson]

Yes, indeed. I've often wondered about that netherworld, between life and death, and what could happen there.

[karmasoup]

Brilliant. As the mother of a mixed race child, I humbly thank you for this.

[encrefloue]

This is so touching. Thank you, truly.

[halfshellvenus]

Such spare, precise language describing something that should be simple, but isn't.

as we breathe.
Or try to.
Sorry for the walls.
I liked this progression, with that unexpected afterthought of humor and truth.

When we remove our flags, scrape the language from our tongues, and take off our skins, we are all in the middle. We are humanity.

You'd think that we would start there instead of having to work so hard to reach that point, and yet, yet... we more often don't.

[encrefloue]

Thank you so much. You're so right-we so easily become wrapped up in the noise and the borders and the posturing. It does seem backwards that we value the rind far more than the core.

[d0gs]

I love the intensity of this so much!

[encrefloue]

Thank you so much!

[flipflop_diva]

I love how powerful this is, and I love how it's really just a one-sided conversation and yet it says so much.

[encrefloue]

So glad that you found the simple structure effective! Thank you!