LJ Idol Season 11: Week 23 - "If you haven't lived it, it won't come out of your horn."

[encrefloue]

My entry has been narrated by viagra, my intersection partner. Please listen along for the gravitas that his voice bestows on the piece. Don't forget to read and support his work!

Cornucopias

Never had a knee on my neck.

Guess I can still sing.

Never had someone to protect.

Guess I’ll do my thing.

Never scared to wear a hoodie.

Guess I’ll wear something

Comments

[bleodswean]

Strong strong stuff here and that final stanza - WOW!

[karmasoup]

I love the poetic, musical, rhythmic brilliance of this poem... your ability to be so poignant so precisely and concisely is so often so enticing, and I am regularly blow away in awe... but your ending statement, as if only an afterthought, hits so hard it leaves one breathless. Bless you for this deeply drilling drumbeat.

[d0gs]

This is wonderful and has such an important message! One of my faves <3

[flipflop_diva]

Very powerful. And heartbreaking too.

[halfshellvenus]

Powerful and timely, with all of its awful truths (STILL no justice for Trayvon Martin).

Cornucopias
of torn utopias
/
Cornucopias
of scorn too copious.
Excellent wordplay and also bitterly true.

The final stanza is fantastic, and the one part that can't be expressed via audo (the emaciated inside the emancipated) is especially good. Even those 'freed' so long ago are still struggling, and too many are still starving for the lack of both plenty and liberty.