The tale of Mr. Humphreys and the girl

[endeared_one]

OK I figured it out! Here it is guys, its long, will take the average reader about 10-15 min and please give me your feedback! Both happy and critical!
Thanks and I hope you enjoy. Keep in mind I wrote this with an 80 yr old stuck in my head

Comments

[amnistie]

Well, I agree with your Gramma (who's opinion is probably the only one that actually counts in the scheme of things!) that it is lovely and that you really should try your hand at children's literature. Not that I don't think you could write any genre, but you have a lyrical style that fits with that one.

[endeared_one]

shanks!!

[shatteredhavoc]

sadly, i didn't make it to this story until today