Exactly That Girl

[equinox_blue]

Title: Exactly That Girl
Rating: PG-13 for sex
Genre: Fluffy angst
Characters/Pairings: Lily/James
Spoilers: Pre-series, so none, really.
Summary: She let him go once and is getting him back
Notes: No beta, except myself. Cross posted. Prompt "electic shock" 7spells. First fic in awhile, so go easy on me, my brain is slightly haywire lately. :)

Comments

[cdniche]

Oh, this is beautiful! The writing and flow are simply excellent. It's so short, but you still get lost and forget that you're just reading. It's so canon. I love the way you characterize James and how love can change a person.

I really enjoyed this. I look forward to reading more of your work if you post it.

[equinox_blue]

Aww, thank you so much! I try to work within canon as much as possible while creating my own world for the characters...glad to know that I succeeded with this one! :)

As for more of my work, I have all my fanfic tagged according to fandom and such. I don't have a huge amount of work, but there's more. :) [/shameless self-pimpage] lol

[faerichylde]

I love this! I really like how you show Lily's past pride and how she's willing to throw it away for James.

Just one thing:
She’s willing to do whatever she can to show him that this time, not his marriage proposal nor even the threat of Voldemort will going to scare her back to her muggle parents’ house in Surrey.

Umm... should that be "is going"? Sorry for being nit-picky...

[equinox_blue]

Yay! I'm glad you enjoyed it...angst is really the hardest for me to write, so I'm happy that it worked out in this one!

...oops. Changed that! Thanks for pointing it out though, I do sometimes miss things; the perils of beta-ing my own fics, haha. =)

[faerichylde]

Hmmm... if they have happy-make-up!sex at the end is it still angst?

Haha, no problem. At least someone appreciates it, my friends get quite miffed when I do it to them.

[equinox_blue]

hmmm...good question. I guess it's just angst with a happy, er, ending. =)

Admittedly, strangers pointing out my mistakes is a bit embarrassing, but I do my own editing and such, so errors are inevitable. I'm always grateful if someone points it out early rather than later. =) I'm quite the grammar freak myself, so I know what it is to be unappreciated by friends, lol. :)

[ginevrawp]

This was simply beautiful.

[equinox_blue]

Thank you for the compliment! =)

[liebedance]

I like this a lot. I like how Lily thinks/knows that she shouldn't be that girl, but James makes her that girl. I also love how you show that the reason that they fought is because she was scared -- at least, that is what I inferred.

Nicely done!

[equinox_blue]

*beams* Thank you! And yup yup, you inferred right--Lily is a commitment-phobe (which I heartily relate to...shh! :) ).