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writerverse Phase 4, Challenge #32

Nov 14, 2012 00:37

TITLE: Wants to Have and to Hold
GENRE: Essay?
WORD COUNT: 343
RATING: G
SUMMARY: Wanting comes with all sorts of consequences and caveats.
NOTES: For Challenge #32, With Seconds on the Clock. Too much rambling and repetition of words.

( The ascetic attempts to suppress this emotion, strip themselves down to a feelingless zen of peace and detachment. )

Comments 4

shana0809 November 16 2012, 07:02:57 UTC

I liked this. It's really different from what I usually read. This is very introspective. It really looks at the human condition of being in a continual state of want where wanting is in itself the most fulfulling part of the whole situation.

As you've said it's very repitious, but that's not so bad because it feels like a piece that's being used to feel out the idea. I'd really like to see what you do with this, if anything.

erifnosmirc November 20 2012, 21:07:20 UTC

Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I've been feeling like this recently and wondering about it. I guess this is more of a philosophical rant than anything, but I didn't know what genre to list it as, heh.

I was running out of synonyms for "want," and my thought process kept bouncing back between the act of wanting and what that entailed emotionally. Just getting words and semi-coherent writing down was my main objective because of the time limit, though I don't know. Where else could I take this if I ever went back to it? Maybe how to deal with the wanting? Hmm...

meepalicious November 17 2012, 11:37:48 UTC

I really enjoyed reading this. I think this prompt has brought out a lot of introspection and I'm really intrigued by the wants you write about. It's interesting to me that you never say what it is that you want, which makes the reader the subject of the piece, because we're free to imagine ourselves as the narrator, wanting what we want but are too afraid to ask for or work for or get.

erifnosmirc November 20 2012, 22:18:07 UTC

Thanks, I'm glad you found some interest in this! I wanted this to be about the act and experience of wanting rather than the object of it, simply because that's where my focus was at the time. Though, I like your idea that the wanted things are left ambiguous so readers can put themselves in place.