Naruto, [doujutsu]: "Kagome, Kagome" (Neji/Hinata)

[kill_me_faster]

SUDDEN BURST OF CREATIVE WRITING URGE.

Title: Kagome, Kagome
Author: Lorelei DiAngelo (to all you faps who still call me "Demi" :P)
Rating: Uh...hard PG-13 for allusions to sex/b00bies? O.o I hate writing things other than porn, 'cuz then you can't tell what rating to give it.
Pairing: Neji/Hinata. For the win/lose. I can't decide which. But I

Comments

[omni_chan]

wah! I loved it! It was so beautiful and pretty and beautiful and nice!

[ayaweird]

The emotion underneath this one is so beautifully expressed. I really love they way you wrote this...it's very poetic and dreamlike; I love how there is very little dialogue -- it really gives the few lines that are there much more meaning, not to mention the last scene is incredible. The hope that begins to reveal itself is so sweet and fragile...it's enough to break one's heart. I love this story.

[beachlass]

Lovely, and finely drawn... the way the Neji sets his determination on Hinata's happiness, and ives up trying to control everything, your use of description and the way you strung the scenes together... it's like a portrait sketched in few a few decisve lines

[kill_me_faster]

OMG LOLZ I win. >D

[kill_me_faster]

Oh, come on, you totally didn't have to come back and give this such a glowing review NOW. XD;; Though it did give me the fuzzies inside.

The only thing I especially like is that all the dialogue was in wannabe anime-fag Japanese until the very end. And it didn't make me look like a weeaboo. /EGO Then again, s'not like it was hard considering THERE WASN'T REALLY DIALOGUE TO BEGIN WITH. *deflate*

Oh, well. But still. I am actually really really glad you think highly of this fic because it's the only thing for Naruto I will ever write ever. The end.

[winterwing3000]

Very nice piece! =D I thoroughly enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing! +mems.