[Fic] The Meaning in Our Hands

[evilgeniuskoji]

Title: The Meaning in Our Hands
Chapter: 1/1
Author: evilgeniuskoji
Pairing: Reita/Ruki
Theme: Last train ride home 15memories
Genre: Angst, romance, general
Rating: PG
Warning: None
Summary: Don't let go till we get home. Let's just get on a train and go.
Comments: To tide you over till I get the next chapter up.

Comments

[dream_of_kawaii]

Oww. You're just to good at this angsty, romance stuff. >__>

The lingering at the station and holding hands throughout the whole journey was the sweetest yet most bitter part. Its over, they both know it, and an empty gesture but it shows a shared reluctance to let go. :(

Beautiful as always. x

[evilgeniuskoji]

And not plain old romance, but we all have our faults? =/

Yes, yes, I'm glad you understood it. That was my favorite part as well.

You flatter me, but thank you~.

[dream_of_kawaii]

Romance is Romance even if its not all sparkles and happy endings. ;P Its realistic and shows a different kind of depth... definitely not a fault. <3

[bi_bye]

ffs, i loved this. it just had this really quiet, unsettling feeling, like you knew everything was off and you could feel something bad happening. and cha, i love ruki the heart-breaker. it seems so hard to write him any other way.

and like hyacinthdreams said, i like the attention paid to the details, especially the focus on the hands.

lovely~♥

[evilgeniuskoji]

Aww, thanks. I did try. =O

[hereticpop]

I was in a mood for some angst today and ha, this was perfect. ♥

your detailed descriptions work amazingly well and omg, have I ever mentioned that I love trains? trains are absolute win [train stations too] and I love reading about trains. XD anyway. there's something really heartbreaking in this fic, I mean sure it's about breaking up but it feels as if it was something bigger, heavier, almost like dying or something. and gah, you just manage to keep this amazing balance between descriptions and emotions in angst, without turning it into some emofest [something that I do when trying angst :/]. although I shouldn't encourage you to write more angst because it will kill me. :P

I lie, I love the way good angst leaves me close to tears

[evilgeniuskoji]

Haha, good to hear. :3 I love trains too, and the thought of them, so when I first saw this challenge I immediately thought of the vibe I wanted to share with it. It's a pity I haven't written it till now, but here we are.

It won't kill you, I hope! xD So do I. Thanks for reading, deary. <3

[ritsumatsu]

The way you wrote their hesitance to leave the train station, seeming at first to be completely detached, yet also as if they were waiting for something to happen; something to save them from having to end this was subtle, but truly lovely.
Focusing on the hands was a nice touch. The symbolism of there being so little left in their relationship, just this weak connection that was more out of habit than anything; or possibly a silent refusal to "let go" of what they once had. The release of their hands at the end being the incontestable end was beautiful in its mournful realism.
It would be interesting to see this go a step further. Maybe a glimpse into more of the after effects on both of them. hint hint ;)

[evilgeniuskoji]

Thank you! I ended up focusing a lot more on their hands than I thought I would. At first it was just a nice little touch, an after thought. Then I started adding more and more, until it became the focus of the story.

Pfft, a sequel? Nah, I don't think so. It'd ruin the effect of it, imo.

[tokidokiko]

how sad.
it somehow reminds me of a song.
it's in chinese though.

[evilgeniuskoji]

Haha, random fact: Am Chinese.

I'll take it as a compliment? Thanks for reading. :3

[tokidokiko]

oh, really? I know cantonese only though...
the song this story reminds me of is Julian Cheng's 10 fingers laced
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TeK7qlCXxvk&fmt=18

yes, a compliment and to all your other lovely stories too. i like how it's focused around their hands and the slightest details surrounding this moment into time sceneary

somehow, i imagine this is like Reita's last request: to hold Ruki's hand one more time after the other has said it's over between them

[evilgeniuskoji]

Coincidentially, so do I. I'm very rough with it, though. e.e;;

Ah, I'll give it a listen. Thank you. ^^

Hmm, it does seem like that, yeah? But it's not like Ruki was objective to it, too.

...Listening to the song right now. xD Does seem to fit the story, yes.