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[Orig] Something Beautiful

Aug 19, 2009 00:22

Something Beautiful

They had something beautiful, but they kept breaking it, crushing it underfoot and grinding it into the asphalt like an old cigarette butt. They threw around words like daggers, stabbing and scratching and hurting each other because he could never let go of that doubt that the happiness they found was real. Something was ( Read more... )

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phobiaplague August 19 2009, 07:52:19 UTC

I am still struggling to recover from the rp, which knocked the shit out of me. Seriously, that was probably the most emotionally raw rps we've ever done.

That aside, this captures it all beautifully. You've wrapped up all the mixed feelings and anxiety and made it into something that is lovely while still keeping true to the emotions.

You summed up their whole reason for fighting and making up. This is a lovely piece, bb.

evilgeniuskoji August 19 2009, 07:59:51 UTC

Oh, I agree. They're asshats for making us sit through that. Drama queens.

phobiaplague August 19 2009, 08:02:34 UTC

They are indeed. They like to stomp on hearts. They are, man. Yes~.

kill_me_cruel August 19 2009, 11:28:58 UTC

well~ heartwrenching indeed...
but also beautifull.

evilgeniuskoji August 19 2009, 15:58:57 UTC

Thanks. :3

hereticpop August 19 2009, 17:04:49 UTC

ah~, the pain. really good indeed. it's practically soaked in pain and hurt and some breathtaking desperation. I love characters with such relationships, it's just... gah, so intense.

yup, intense is the word, I guess. I know practically nothing about the characters but I'm showered with their emotions and it's interesting in a way. makes me curious about their story. [shame it's a rp. you should write original fic more often. :D] also, you closed it nicely in a circle, from something beautiful, through all that pain yet back to something beautiful, and somehow the loving and hurting seems unbreakably tied together.

uh, I wish I wasn't so hungoverly numb so that I could enjoy the angst more. XD *shot*

evilgeniuskoji August 19 2009, 17:11:16 UTC

Ah, I've written some other original fics about them, but yeah, their story is mainly stuck in teh rp. Maybe one day we can write it out. ;3 It'd be fun.

A short rundown of how these kids are normally, though: Toshiro is a snarky kid who acts all cheerful and sunny just to annoy people. He was also a bit of a slut. Rune however, is that hardass librarian type who always reads and uses big words. :3

Thanks for reading this, deary. :3 Go drink some water! And eat something.