The Butterfly Room

[evilgeniuskoji]

This was an original piece I wrote some time last year for my creative class, but never got around to publishing it on here because at the time I quite detested the stuff I wrote for that class. I have to resubmit a piece of writing again tomorrow for a deadline, and stumbled upon this older piece and upon reading it again, it's not so bad at all.

Comments

[dream_of_kawaii]

0__0… Creepy. This was an interesting piece of writing. I liked the introduction and unusual setting for a story with a supernatural edge. It’s a shame it had to end so soon… xP
I really enjoy your horror/supernatural themed fiction. I think you write that kind of genre well… but of course I think that about most things you write, lol. xD In my opinion if you wanted to make a career of writing I don’t think you would have too much of a problem. :3

[evilgeniuskoji]

Yeah, I thought so too. Creepy.
I', glad you like it. Hahaha, that's flattery and optimism again. I don't have a head for plot; I think I'm far better off editing or something. Writing, I wish.

Thanks for always reading and supporting me though. ^^

[hereticpop]

well, I have to agree, not so bad at all. ;)

first off, I love the setting. I went "woohoo! :D" from the very beginning, because, as I would've mentioned on my lj had I not been neglecting it awfully, I've been loving samurai and samurai themes for quite some time now. I've been even thinking of writing something with such a theme. but nevermind, back to your writing.

as usual, I could feel the mood and see the room. I think you have a talent for describing things in such a way that they are easy to imagine, it's basically unconscious. I even had goosebumps at some point. [perhaps I should close the window? it's rather chilly. ;D ]

if anything, I'm a little disappointed that it ends so abruptly. you build the scene in detail, finely create the atmosphere, and them wham! the climax, and before I know it's over. it doesn't read bad, but I still have a feeling of distortion of proportions [for the lack of better expression].

and I think there is something wrong with the last sentence? it ends with and the laughter of children inside

[evilgeniuskoji]

As usual you've hit the nail on the head, you know? When I re-read this, I thought that the ending was kind of off too but couldn't be bothered to fix it. But yes, it really was something to just bring about an end.

<33 Love your comments, always. They always have a certain amount of depth to them that makes it worthwhile to post anything. I'll think of you and try to write more. <3