The aaangst! I was really worried this wasn't going to have a happy ending, actually; you carried the tension beautifully throughout and it really dragged me along to the end. Which was happy. Yay!
Essentially, I really liked this - deliciously angsty and with a happy ending, and with really good characterisations of Ryan and Esposito. I loved their conversations with each other, they felt very natural... and, really, I loved it =D
You had me at “Teixeira’s my favorite because we have the same birth date.”
“Did you know I watched ‘The Sound of Music’ three times in the last week?” Ryan smiled, his breath hitching in his throat. “My favorite movie,” he sighed. This made me so freaking happy, I don't even think I can explain how. <3
His heart had already been broken too many times for those four words alone to tape it back together. this, THIS you did that with this fic, to me, just fyi.
I can't believe you were going to not post this, I see no tire marks, I think the bus suffered more damage from hitting this fic than the fic suffered from the bus.
'scuse me while I go cry (in a thoroughly good way)
Re: dolphin's temporal lobes have exploded from the noise I madeevraealtanaOctober 2 2010, 04:59:28 UTC
dolphins' temporal lobes have exploded from the noise I made
Heehee! The comment title made me giggle x]
Mark Teixiera's birth date
April 11th, 1980. Does Ryan seem like an April birthday to anyone else? & I see Javi as sometime in late June...June 27th. I actually wanted Ryan to be April 4th >> but the 11th works too ^^;;;
This made me so freaking happy, I don't even think I can explain how. <3
Ohhhh good! My beta was concerned that I was making Ryan too girly >> and having his favorite movie be "The Sound of Music" didn't really help. But I'm glad it worked! I debated changing that bit.
you did that with this fic, to me, just fyi.
OH NO! Can I super-glue your heart back together?! I didn't mean to break it ;____;
'scuse me while I go cry (in a thoroughly good way) LOL, I'm going to have to take your word for it that it's crying in a good way =P but here! I have a Sob Corner all set up with tissues, emotional movies, and recordings of the interviews where we find out that LanieEspo is going to be canon really
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Re: dolphin's temporal lobes have exploded from the noise I madepure_morningsOctober 2 2010, 15:12:19 UTC
No no I meant that it rips it apart and glues it back together!
I can totally see him as an April baby, though I'm a little biased since I'm an April baby, or perhaps that makes me a better judge of who are other possible April babies.
The sound of music thing got me because in Young Avengers it's "one of" Billy's favorite movies.
As long as you didn't leave any wet tears in the Sob Corner I would be happy to use it.
I read this in an airport and on two different planes (in offline mode, I swear). Thank you, thank you, for keeping me sane on four hours of sleep.
I can't recall a Ryan/Esposito fic that went this deep on the tide of angst, but you carried it so well and I didn't want Ryan to take Esposito back. I only held out hope for Espo's redemption because of that tight smile in the doorway! And I'm so glad you didn't leave it with the 'four word stitch', because that would have been too easy and I would have been angry at Ryan again. What a ride, well done!
Thank you, thank you, for keeping me sane on four hours of sleep.
Oh, you're welcome! I'm glad I was able to keep you awake & alive =D
this deep on the tide of angst
I know =[[ when I wrote this, I had a bit of an angst fixation, and I just...couldn't make it happy >> I tried. I really did. It just didn't work.
I'm so glad you didn't leave it with the 'four word stitch'
Oh, ugh! I could never have done that. I spent the whole first 3/4 of the fic tearing Ryan apart -- there's no way he would have forgiven and moved on that easily, especially after he made up his mind to end things. But I couldn't just leave them broken up, either... =\ because their love is just too perfect to leave it in ruins. Plus, it would probably have broken pure_mornings's heart to see them not get back together with love & committment & forgiveness x] Their relationship is by no means "fixed", and had I had time I would have written the slow, tentative, somewhat mistrusting make-up sex scene, but the clock hates me, so I didn't have that option
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Oh, write it: do it for your readers! There's no time limit now. :D
But I couldn't just leave them broken up, either... =\ because their love is just too perfect to leave it in ruins.
The potential could have been something perfect, but when it starts on such rocky foundations (no trust, no agreement on mutual expectations), can it still get there? Especially once everyone at work finds out they're together and, eventually, how it started? Okay, I think it could... with a lot of time, work and unprompted couples' counselling from Castle. Yay, baggage! D:
True, true! =D ...but now I'm in a fluffy mood ;_; I'll try, though! I'll try to be angsty again, on behalf of the readers that I didn't even know I had.
unprompted couples' counselling from Castle ...oh man. I feel a somewhat crackish sequel coming on.
Read this when I was on vacation and I think out of all of the stories submitted, this was the one that made me the most emotional. When I read it through the first time I felt like I couldn't really breathe until the end when everything was ok after all! Oh those boys!
=O BREATHE, JEN, BREATHE! I like you NOT being asphyxiated by emotion =[[
Though I'm glad this fic made an impression ;)
When I wrote this, I was thinking -- "hmm, let's make something light & fluffy to recover from the massive amount of angst I've been writing lately." Uhhh...I think I should call that mission a "failure". xP If anything this just increased the steepness of my spiral of angst. GEEZ! I NEED A FLUFF PROMPT! ;_; or else the boys are just going to keep having sucky lives and hating each other until they get together. That's just kind-of how it goes. I gotta get out of this fic funk.
Well thennnnn...I think you should give me a prompt =] I have 2 fics in progress, but only one of them is R/E, and it's...eh. Somewhat un-fluffy. SO YOU SHOULD PROMPT ME! =D
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Essentially, I really liked this - deliciously angsty and with a happy ending, and with really good characterisations of Ryan and Esposito. I loved their conversations with each other, they felt very natural... and, really, I loved it =D
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Oooooh, I couldn't do that to the boys =[[ I love them too much. They deserve some happiness.
Glad you liked it =D *whew* so it wasn't a total disaster, then.
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Ahem. Right. Words. In english right?
You had me at “Teixeira’s my favorite because we have the same birth date.”
“Did you know I watched ‘The Sound of Music’ three times in the last week?”
Ryan smiled, his breath hitching in his throat. “My favorite movie,” he sighed.
This made me so freaking happy, I don't even think I can explain how. <3
His heart had already been broken too many times for those four words alone to tape it back together. this, THIS you did that with this fic, to me, just fyi.
I can't believe you were going to not post this, I see no tire marks, I think the bus suffered more damage from hitting this fic than the fic suffered from the bus.
'scuse me while I go cry (in a thoroughly good way)
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Heehee! The comment title made me giggle x]
Mark Teixiera's birth date
April 11th, 1980. Does Ryan seem like an April birthday to anyone else? & I see Javi as sometime in late June...June 27th. I actually wanted Ryan to be April 4th >> but the 11th works too ^^;;;
This made me so freaking happy, I don't even think I can explain how. <3
Ohhhh good! My beta was concerned that I was making Ryan too girly >> and having his favorite movie be "The Sound of Music" didn't really help. But I'm glad it worked! I debated changing that bit.
you did that with this fic, to me, just fyi.
OH NO! Can I super-glue your heart back together?! I didn't mean to break it ;____;
'scuse me while I go cry (in a thoroughly good way)
LOL, I'm going to have to take your word for it that it's crying in a good way =P but here! I have a Sob Corner all set up with tissues, emotional movies, and recordings of the interviews where we find out that LanieEspo is going to be canon really ( ... )
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I can totally see him as an April baby, though I'm a little biased since I'm an April baby, or perhaps that makes me a better judge of who are other possible April babies.
The sound of music thing got me because in
Young Avengers it's "one of" Billy's favorite movies.
As long as you didn't leave any wet tears in the Sob Corner I would be happy to use it.
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He really does seem like an April baby! What day in April were you born? Wouldn't it be epic if you & Ryan had the same birthday?
=OOO OMG! I HAVE A FIC IDEA.
The Sob Corner is clean & dry & ready for your use =]
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I can't recall a Ryan/Esposito fic that went this deep on the tide of angst, but you carried it so well and I didn't want Ryan to take Esposito back. I only held out hope for Espo's redemption because of that tight smile in the doorway! And I'm so glad you didn't leave it with the 'four word stitch', because that would have been too easy and I would have been angry at Ryan again. What a ride, well done!
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Oh, you're welcome! I'm glad I was able to keep you awake & alive =D
this deep on the tide of angst
I know =[[ when I wrote this, I had a bit of an angst fixation, and I just...couldn't make it happy >> I tried. I really did. It just didn't work.
I'm so glad you didn't leave it with the 'four word stitch'
Oh, ugh! I could never have done that. I spent the whole first 3/4 of the fic tearing Ryan apart -- there's no way he would have forgiven and moved on that easily, especially after he made up his mind to end things. But I couldn't just leave them broken up, either... =\ because their love is just too perfect to leave it in ruins. Plus, it would probably have broken pure_mornings's heart to see them not get back together with love & committment & forgiveness x] Their relationship is by no means "fixed", and had I had time I would have written the slow, tentative, somewhat mistrusting make-up sex scene, but the clock hates me, so I didn't have that option ( ... )
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But I couldn't just leave them broken up, either... =\ because their love is just too perfect to leave it in ruins.
The potential could have been something perfect, but when it starts on such rocky foundations (no trust, no agreement on mutual expectations), can it still get there? Especially once everyone at work finds out they're together and, eventually, how it started? Okay, I think it could... with a lot of time, work and unprompted couples' counselling from Castle. Yay, baggage! D:
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unprompted couples' counselling from Castle
...oh man. I feel a somewhat crackish sequel coming on.
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Fab job hon!
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Though I'm glad this fic made an impression ;)
When I wrote this, I was thinking -- "hmm, let's make something light & fluffy to recover from the massive amount of angst I've been writing lately." Uhhh...I think I should call that mission a "failure". xP If anything this just increased the steepness of my spiral of angst. GEEZ! I NEED A FLUFF PROMPT! ;_; or else the boys are just going to keep having sucky lives and hating each other until they get together. That's just kind-of how it goes. I gotta get out of this fic funk.
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I like angst... I prefer fluff but I'll read any Ryan & Esposito that you have for me. ;)
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