Nice fic! the one part that stuck out for me was when the only thing Dino noticed about his wife was the fact that her lipstick was the colour of Bianchi's hair. (: I also really liked the metaphors and imagery you put in here and, I must admit, let out a little chuckle when Dino said that he was running out of adjectives to describe Bianchi.
I have to say you did an amazing job with the characters you picked. I loved the vivid descriptions. And the fact that you wrote from Dino's point of view really grabbed a hold of the reader and left us wanting more.
I liked the direction the relationship and how you portrayed the two of them in it, not all sunshine and daffodils but a darker undertone given their positions in the Mafia world. Nicely done, and thank you for participating at write_and_run!
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I have to say you did an amazing job with the characters you picked. I loved the vivid descriptions. And the fact that you wrote from Dino's point of view really grabbed a hold of the reader and left us wanting more.
I liked the direction the relationship and how you portrayed the two of them in it, not all sunshine and daffodils but a darker undertone given their positions in the Mafia world. Nicely done, and thank you for participating at write_and_run!
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