Comments | exlibras_vixy: Oh, and some writing:

exlibras_vixy

Oh, and some writing:

Oct 09, 2006 11:50

My assignment for Showing & Telling class at uni. We had to write the same situation (based on the theme of 'leaving') twice -- When demonstrating the art of showing, one telling.

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She smiled the smile of a cat chibibluebird October 10 2006, 17:14:08 UTC

I really like the 1st para. of the second take.

Re: She smiled the smile of a cat exlibras_vixy October 10 2006, 20:25:24 UTC

*grins* I just got reply back from my seminar leader, and she didn't like my using 'graced' (ie, 'graced her lips'). She said it was arrchaic and jarring.

Re: She smiled the smile of a cat chibibluebird October 10 2006, 20:54:19 UTC

jarring? I didn't even notice it! ah well, what can you do.