Knots: Patient Zero (10/12)

Jan 26, 2006 00:23

Part One (By Pitza)
Part Two
Part Three
Part Four
Part Five
Part Six
Part Seven
Part Eight
Part NineNotes: This was supposed to be the final chapter, but there was a change of plans because I have a couple of loose ends that need to be tied up from Wilson’s POV, and I need to let the last scenes between House and Wilson stand pretty much alone in ( Read more... )

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drunken_kurage January 28 2006, 07:06:17 UTC
i just had to sit and read through the entire thing. it's just...wow. the way you can just see the emotion is absolutely brilliant. though sometimes it was just so frustrating. wanting them to comes to terms and resolve, but knowing that it wouldn't be that simple...all the while doing such a wonderful job on how they would approach it.

just...gah.

a lot of other readers have pro'ly described how they've been affected by the story. i'm not quite that eloquent. i can only describe it as that unique feeling you have, when having that first breath of air after being under water for a while.

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extrabitter January 30 2006, 06:06:11 UTC
I've been trying to keep this piece as realistic as possible from an emotional point of view. If you read the comments on earlier chapters, you know that I started out my research by interviewing rape survivors and reading about the psychological profiles of sexual predators. Now, I've diverted from my research a lot in drawing Wilson and attempting to make him a sympathetic figure, but there are some pieces of the proflies left in the character.

Getting reaction from those who have read the piece as an almost finished whole is great. I'm glad that it moved you enough to comment. Thank you!

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peoplewantducks January 28 2006, 15:24:53 UTC
am waiting with bated breath for the last two parts!

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albinolady January 29 2006, 06:04:11 UTC
YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY!

thats all i have to say........

that and we need...for lack of a better word since im so tired i can only remember how to make a cereal bottle, a gentle/comforting but hot steamy sex scene.. with a little cuddling in the end ;)

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extrabitter January 30 2006, 06:09:28 UTC
I'm not exactly easing up at the end. This piece is pretty much all hurt, no comfort, but there's one moment near the end that you'll probably like. I'm still working on it.

But no cuddling. I promise that there will be no cuddling at all. Lots of folks write cuddling; I'm not one of them.

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bibliosylph February 13 2006, 01:35:54 UTC
Okay now. Sorry I didn't comment on this sooner. I was sorta hanging around for 11 and 12!

Anyway. Within the context of House needing to get away and do his thing, the red light section works nicely. And the remote sense is good, because it's (to me) like he was finding better parallels to home there than he could in the foreign hospital.

I thought gum problems were related to liver? But I never understand the medical parts except in context with themselves.

The dream is so much like a dream, and so consistent with how his subconscious has to be working, I'm actually impressed. Only there's a typo: "he sees Wilson nude body stretched out on top of the covers, " that I'm sure you'll want to attend to. :-)

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extrabitter February 13 2006, 01:57:42 UTC
It's so weird that you'd pick right now to comment. I'm about to turn off Airport and sit down to write the very last scene, then send the whole thing to Namaste for a bit of a read-through before posting.

Having one's teeth cleaned is a great way to pick up an infection. I've ended up septic after having mine cleaned on two occasions. The porous tissue of the gums is like an open door with a big sign on it. I thought it was a very House thing to pick up. II probably could have made House's thought process from the gaping mouth of the woman on the cover to his cynical assessment of porn to bacterial endocardidis a little clearer, since this is prose. (This is basically a note to myself for the rewrite.) But I was imagining that moment we get in some shows where House figures everything out from something totally random.

I'll go fix that typo now. I get to where I just can't see them sometimes, and I've been exhausted since the beginning of January, which has slowed me down considerably.

OK, back to work now.

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bibliosylph February 13 2006, 02:04:28 UTC
>>Having one's teeth cleaned is a great way to pick up an infection. I've ended up septic after having mine cleaned on two occasions. The porous tissue of the gums is like an open door with a big sign on it.<<

Ohhh, like poor Bobby Darin with his plastic heart valves and then the no antibiotic dental work that infected his heart and led to his unfortunate early death. Anyway. Yes, I get it now. And, cool. Fun House diagnostic trick.

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kiwi_from_hell August 21 2006, 00:42:34 UTC
I'm just rereading this and had to tell you what a wonderful line this is:

There’s no shame in satisfaction until you are forced to understand what gets you off.

It's very House, and very much like his better observations of people's behaviour. The whole thing is wonderful (and even better the second time reading it than the first), but that line really struck me.

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extrabitter August 21 2006, 04:08:11 UTC
Thank you for your kind words. I have such conflicted feelings about this piece--it still feels half finished to me, and I really would like to spend some time making it as good as I know it can be. I've sort of re-conceptualized it as a thing where the beginning point of this story--essentially my Ch. 2, would become a resolution of sorts of post-Stacy tensions between House and Wilson. I'd go back and write a backstory for them that would set up some of the terrible actions, and then use parts of the last five chapters along with some new material to get them back to a point of neutrality.

A fair number of readers didn't care for the trip to Switzerland, but I'm proud of some of the stuff in this chapter. Rereading it to give context to your comment was an interesting experience.

Sorry to go on like that.

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