Guns n Roses - Week Three

[eyedsofmarch]

Author's note: This is the third part of a larger story: a narrative of a woman who is traveling across Canada because her abusive ex husband had been released on parole after serving a sentence for murdering a man he suspected she was cheating with. There are several references to things revealed in the two prior installments. They can be found

Comments

[keppiehed]

Ooh, that was a great ending. I love how you worked the lyrics in. I often struggle with songfics myself, but this had a natural flow to it, and you worked what you wanted to say in around the lyrics very well. It seemed like something you wrote yourself! Kudos to you for handling a tough job with grace, and for tackling the prompt in the most direct way I've seen yet.

[eyedsofmarch]

Thank you. I actually thought this was the weakest of the three. The Hip and Smashing Pumpkins both had that grunge feel that went with that era, lending itself perfectly to the theme I've chosen, while GNR was classic metal - full of rowdiness and love songs. That made it hard to conjure memories for her as she drove and listened to her old CDs. There are other ways I could have gone, and maybe should have, but half way through I figured I'd better get on some plot development and this way worked out best. Again, thanks. I'm off to do my reading today, and I look forward to reading yours.

[merthin]

Based on your comment, I should go back and read the other two. I will, if time permits.

I enjoy the song lyrics as well. My only suggestion for the rest of the piece (and this is difficult depending on how much plot development you're trying to do), show me more, tell me less. The end is great, rife with showing. :-)

[eyedsofmarch]

I'm more of the old school type. I believe that a story has a narrator and that stories are meant to be told. The whole shift to make reading like TV or movies with action and dialogue in spades and lacking in musing and narrator's thoughts isn't really all that palatable to me.

I like stories that are told. Of course, dialogue and action are fine too, to fill out a story, but in balance, not as a play by play like I'm watching a screen. Some things are much easier and shorter to tell, and should be.

That doesn't mean I actually liked the way this one turned out, the others were better. If you do read them, please let me know what you think. If you like the "showing" style, you'll probably like the first the best.