Loathing - Week 1

Jan 30, 2011 15:52

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unnameduntamed February 3 2011, 23:41:50 UTC
I did wonder where you were going when the mother started being a bit more positive but then came the ending. Oh wow! I got the hugest chill from it.

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eyedsofmarch February 4 2011, 03:39:54 UTC

Thank you!

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keppiehed February 7 2011, 14:35:28 UTC
I think the beginning was a little unclear, but maybe that was just me. It did settle in nicely, though, and your characters really brought the story to life. Do you have plans to continue this? It seems like there is more than enough of an idea to do so, if you are not constrained by prompts. What a way to end with a bang, whatever you decide!

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eyedsofmarch February 7 2011, 16:45:21 UTC

Nah, it's not just you. I kept meaning to get back and edit it but other stuff kept coming up.

I'm not sure if I'll explore this universe again or not, I don't have any ideas for it yet. It was really just a fleeting flash of imagination that caused me to come up with this - I have no clue what or where they are either.

Thanks!

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thewindforest February 8 2011, 00:53:40 UTC
"I have no clue what or where they are either"

I am burning with curiosity as to what they are :D The idea of antennae and spindly limbs gave me an excellent picture of some cute faerie-insect like creatures- which made the ending all the more chilling! Awesome piece!

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eyedsofmarch February 8 2011, 01:02:38 UTC

That's pretty much how I'm picturing them too, faerie/insect type creatures, but - that's about it. I'm not sure what the Farry From is (that was part of the "vision" that came to me) but I suppose it is some kind of competition - maybe over the elemental "powers" they have. I don't know, but they are interesting, whoever they are.

Thansk very much!

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katden February 7 2011, 14:41:14 UTC
Ouch! Bad little girl! I'm interested to know if we'll see more from this universe that you've given us a peek at.

Good to have you back, by the way :)

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eyedsofmarch February 7 2011, 16:19:56 UTC

Possibly I suppose, I don't know though - when things like this come from nowhere, they often go back there very quickly. I don't even have it in my head where or what they are, really.

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merthin February 7 2011, 19:42:29 UTC
That is a naughty little girl. She needs a master, one who can both handle and train her, mold her into something useful as opposed to just a hellion. ;-)

Nice piece and it certainly fit the prompt enough for me.

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eyedsofmarch February 7 2011, 19:49:25 UTC

Thanks! That's a good idea for the continuation a couple of the other commenters were asking about. Maybe the papa that abandoned her will come back with someone fit for the task. Maybe when the prompt allows I will go back into this universe.

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