Daisies

[eyedsofmarch]

He stood outside the door clutching a bouquet of daisies in one hand

Comments

[blythe025]

It's kind of surreal feeling, because I kept thinking, Why the hell would he keep holding on to those damn daisies, when his life is about to end. Also, when after his near miss when he turns with a cheery seeming, "Happy Valentines Day," again it seems very odd. But the fact that the daisies are important for their survival ties it all together again so that it works. Very cool way to go with this. :)

[eyedsofmarch]

So much has to get left out of "flash" fiction, I'm still trying to perfect the style, so I know I could have probably thrown better hints along the way.

Thanks for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[vyvyan_wilde]

Very creative! Love the way the tension was written in the first part; it really had me on edge.
And the dick-slapping line made me laugh :D

[eyedsofmarch]

Thank you! I'm glad you got a chuckle out of it.

[darlinleo]

Hi! Welcome to the FLAME :)
That had me wondering -why the heck would he stop to pick daisies...- great ending!

[eyedsofmarch]

Thanks!